#1
Sorry about the caps. I have a tendency to do that when I'm writing in Notepad.


THIS TOWN HAS A REPUTATION
WE'RE THE ONES WHO PAY THE CONSEQUENCES
WE WERE YOUR AVERAGE NEIGHBORHOOD HEROES
WE HADN'T KNOWN DEFEAT IT WAS NOTHING WE COULD SELL

NOW IF YOU'D JUST LISTEN UP...

WE WERE KNEE DEEP AND SINKING
AS THE BRIDGE BEHIND US BURNED
CHIN UP, DRIVING ISN'T A SPORT ANYMORE
RETRACE YOUR STEPS AND DON'T FORGET THIS VOICE
CAUSE WE BECAME, CAUSE WE BECAME
CAUSE WE BECAME HEROES

THIS IS OUR TIME NOW
OUR SOUNDS OUR INTRODUCTION AND WE'LL TRUST YOU TO YELL
A LIT MATCH IS ALL THAT'S LEFT
AT THE SCENE

NOW IF YOU'D JUST FESS IT UP...

WE WERE KNEE DEEP AND SINKING
AS THE BRIDGE BEHIND US BURNED
CHIN UP, DRIVING ISN'T A SPORT ANYMORE
RETRACE YOUR STEPS AND DON'T FORGET THIS VOICE
CAUSE WE BECAME, CAUSE WE BECAME
CAUSE WE BECAME HEROES

WE WERE KNEE DEEP AND SINKING
AS THE BRIDGE BEHIND US BURNED
CHIN UP, DRIVING ISN'T A SPORT ANYMORE
RETRACE YOUR STEPS AND DON'T FORGET THIS VOICE
CAUSE WE BECAME, CAUSE WE BECAME
CAUSE WE BECAME HEROES



All kinds of crits accepted.
#2
I'm not sure what counts as a "critique" here. But! I really like this.
The only thing I can say is, the second verse seems to be not even with the first one in meter. But since Im assuming it's a song, that type of thing doesn't really apply.
#3
The "We were knee deep and sinking" part, is that the chorus? I mean it's good but I feel like it was repeated too much and not enough focus was on the verses, where the story woudl usually take place. That's just my opinion though
It's our responsibilities, not our selves, we need to take seriously
#4
Quote by GuitarGrrl16
I'm not sure what counts as a "critique" here. But! I really like this.
The only thing I can say is, the second verse seems to be not even with the first one in meter. But since Im assuming it's a song, that type of thing doesn't really apply.


Yeah, I'm not too sure about the second verse myself. I just kind of jotted something down as quick as possible. Probably not the smartest thing to do. haha

Quote by Jake Arewood
The "We were knee deep and sinking" part, is that the chorus? I mean it's good but I feel like it was repeated too much and not enough focus was on the verses, where the story woudl usually take place. That's just my opinion though

Yep, that's the chorus. I'll look over it soon and maybe write some more verses to it. It's a relitively short song recorded, only about 2 minutes. :\

I'll definitely add more to it tonight!