#1
Its a working progress tell me what you think and tell me what is just not working ?

1
Chasing in the town.
Lonely shadows facing upside down.
Walking alone.
Always knew that I’ll be on my own
Walls are whispering.
Things I don’t believe in
Pack your bags.
Get out of my frame.


2
Telling me lies
Trusting your words only makes me cry
No Reason
Nothing to life for in this season
Jump from the roof top.
Everything’s ****ed up.
Believe in the things you see.
Forget who you want to be.

Chours
Leave me alone
I can’t take this anymore
Leave me alone
don’t want to see your face
know that you don’t care.
You left me behind
told me I was blinded
I searched for a reason
but I can’t find it.

Bridge
I know this life is not what it looks like.
It’s not a game, for you and I.
I know this time is now the right time
I need to leave it all behind.
I’ve learned from my mistakes
now I know what it takes.
And I don’t need you
I don’t need you.
#2
Quote by SMoelgaard


1
Chasing in the town.
Lonely shadows facing upside down.
Walking alone.
Always knew that I’ll be on my own
Walls are whispering.
Things I don’t believe in
Pack your bags.
Get out of my frame.
i like the first line. im not sure if the "get out of my frame" bit fits with the rest though


2
Telling me lies
Trusting your words only makes me cry
No Reason
Nothing to live for in this season*
Jump from the roof top.
Everything’s ****ed up.
Believe in the things you see.
Forget who you want to be.
season, as in time of year? just wondering because you could just say "world", granted thats a bit cliche...*
Chours
Leave me alone
I can’t take this anymore
Leave me alone
don’t want to see your face
know that you don’t care.
You left me behind
told me I was blinded
I searched for a reason
but I can’t find it.
what about..."i search for a reason but i cant find it"
Bridge
I know this life is not what it looks like.
It’s not a game, for you and I.
I know this time is now the right time
I need to leave it all behind.
I’ve learned from my mistakes
now I know what it takes.
And I don’t need you
I don’t need you.

i really like the bridge part
#3
Quote by sheri234
i really like the bridge part


Thank you very mutch.
As is said its a working progess and not finish just wantede to see how other paople thought it was.
keep the comments comeing.
#5
Quote by SMoelgaard


2
Telling me lies
Trusting your words only makes me cry
No Reason
Nothing to life for in this season
Jump from the roof top.
Everything’s ****ed up.
Believe in the things you see.
Forget who you want to be.


This song is all really good, just one thing though, I think it would sound a little bit better if you made it "Everything's so ****ed up" just add in so. I could actually see this as becoming a real song
Last edited by Adisturbedone at Nov 7, 2009,
#6
Quote by Adisturbedone
This song is all really good, just one thing though, I think it would sound a little bit better if you made it "Everything's so ****ed up" just add in so. I could actually see this as becoming a real song


Thank you very much, glad you like it.

Still keep them comeing.