My friends sister wrote this and wanted him to make a song with it, so while i was over at his house we worked on it and got a rough recording. Its may sound rough, but for a first go, i thought it was pretty good. He's playing guitar, and i'm singing. I have a lead to go with this but we didn't put it in yet.


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hey man, that was a pretty nice song! and pretty well performed by the sounds of things, backing vocals sounded a little flat though at the end

i reckon you should through a big sing along bridge in to make it a classic, and if you record it properly maybe a little bit of an electric guitar on clean towards the end!

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Pretty nice song man!
I definitely like the vocal line (and great emotional singing) however, I really expected some huge sing a long chorus at about 0.51. The part you use a chorus now is a perfect pre-chorus somehow. Imo if you put some huge memorable chorus after the part that's the chorus now, it will be an amazing song, and I mean really amazing.

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Sounds pretty good, but I think it really needs a chorus, it kinda just sounds like several verses put together. That approach is anti-climactic, so find a way to relieve the tension created by the verses. Also, the backing vocals need work, they don't contribute much to the song as is.

Good lead singing, I like the tone. More instrumentation would help out this song.

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I like it a lot. That's actually a pretty big deal coming from me, as I am not an acoustic kinda guy whatsoever. both guitar and vocals on this track are very good, plus I like the lyrics. Nice job!
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Damn, this is a good song, love the lyrics, put me in a good mood. The acoustic guitar needs some mixing, and near the end there I heard you turn a page and laugh, so I would replay it without the laugh, and try to mic the guitar a little bit better, and you should be good.

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Personally I think the "chorus" as it is now works but it would need a stronger arrangement to really make the most of it. Good song though. Love that little moment at about 1:52, can't fake that kind of thing.
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i like the singing! i agree about the background vox needing a little work, but like you said, this was a rough copy. left you a comment on your page too.

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Very good song, for a rough copy as you say this is really good. Good sound quality on guitar and vocals. I like your singing voice too.
Keep up the good work.

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I really like the chords, and your vocals are good. The backup singer needs to stop though (wink-wink). A big, get-your-lighters-out chorus would be really cool, but I can't really see how you go about doing that with this song. Anyway, for a rough cut, it's pretty good.

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