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Boo Bot Baa Bootiful Body

Saw a man, across the hall,
Said he’d come to show me the door,
To a kingdom of magic and hope,
But when I opened it was full of coats,
Oh I do despair,
Raped under the stairs,
In Henry Hoovers Lair,
Oh I do despair,

Had a lady over for tea,
Biscuits, chat and therapy,
I didn’t like how deep she spoke,
Behind her clipboard, something made me choke,
Another piece of cake?
Let’s take another break,
Raped while on a break,
We’ll take another break.

-SOLO-

Took out a loan and went to surgery,
Sewed my ass up shut for safety,
Half way through and something’s wrong,
That’s a rubber but it’s not a glove,
At least it’s confidential,
On an operating table,
Least it’s confidential,
I’m sure he’s a professional,

Now I’m dead, but safe at last,
Only fear necrophiliacs,
Hear a shovel and the dirt it moves,
Why’d they bury me with all this lube?
No this can’t be right,
Raped in the afterlife,
No this can’t be right,
Nothing about this is ****ing right.


C4C.
And Like That. He was Gone.

My Lyrics

Love
Last edited by Andzee at Nov 7, 2009,
#2
Quote by Andzee

Another piece of cake?
Let’s take another break,
Raped while on a break,
We’ll take another break.

These four lines don't seem to work for me very well. Three break's in a row just sound a little weird. I'd consider changing the one in the middle or two on the ends to something else.


Quote by Andzee

Half way through and something’s wrong,
That’s a rubber but it’s not a glove,


This part was excellent, well done.

Quote by Andzee

Least it’s confidential,
I’m sure he’s a professional,


This part doesn't seem to fit with the rest the lines above it and certainly sounds weak compared to what preceded it.

The last verse works well too.

Overall i liked it. It had this sort of tongue in cheek feeling to it, which is needed when writing about something like this. Much impressed.