#1
With you

Another night all alone
None of my friends are home
There nothing else to do
So ill think of you
When it comes to her
I don’t know much
She got the kind of smile
You want to touch

As for me I don’t know
If I am going to play that show
Cuz I’ve been
Booed Off that stage before
Shot down on the dance floor
Please sir can I have some more
As I said there’s nothing better to do
So I guess I’ll take a chance with you

Tonight
I am taking that shot
Life worth living
Is it not?
This plan,
It’s not perfect
That doesn’t mean
It’s not worth it

Now my friends are stuck at home
Sitting there all alone
It’s just me and you
Now I know what I want to do
When it comes to her
I don’t know much
She got the kind of smile
You want to touch
As I said there’s nothing better to do
So I guess I’ll take a chance with you

its an acoustic reggae song tell me what u think
#2
From the words on the page, the care-free, loose reggae vibe came across pretty well. The rhyme scheme here I think was also a good choice given the genre of the song. I think my favorite lines here are: "This plan / It’s not perfect / That doesn’t mean / It’s not worth it". This was concise and memorable.

As far as suggestions go, I would be wary of forcing rhymes. The one that stuck out the most was "when it comes to her, i don't know much / she got the kind of smile you want to touch" Right there it seems like you were searching for something to rhyme with "much" and the image you created (touching a smile) didn't really sit well with me. Why would someone touch a smile? The point I think you were trying to make, in my opinion, was lost in the forced rhyme. It zapped its impact from me.

Also, as I said before, the care-free attitude of the song is very appealing but in some places I feel like it's too care-free and not vulnerable enough. For example, I interpreted this song as a guy saying "**** it, i know i've been rejected in the past but i'm going for it, i'm going after this girl". If that isn't a correct interpretation, then ignore what I'm about to say. If it is, then I think this line could use some rewording: "As I said there’s nothing better to do / So I guess I’ll take a chance with you". The way it is now is too care-free for me. I think you need a little more vulnerability in here, something that expresses that you like this girl a little to make the impact of your "**** it" attitude more powerful. Hopefully that makes a little sense.

Those are just some suggestions and are just my opinion. Like I said, this song had a lot of redeeming qualities. Just some things brought it down a tad. Overall, good job though man
here, My Dear, here it is
#3
thanks for the advice it's going to help a lot
defiantly going to make it more i love her and less
i am bored lets **** thanks alot