#1
please comment on it.. c4c.. its very personal for me


theres so much left to say i cant believe you'll walk away
before we get this chance to show them what we've really made
i threw my heart down put my feelings for you on the line
you stepped right over them your making a mistake this time

ive changed.. not the same.. person thats been around
your gone.. whos to blame.. its my fault we might drownd
you deserve better i can be better let me prove it to you forever and ever
just like we used to say just about every day let me show you how ive changed

i know that all your friends are telling you to get away
but they dont know what we had or the way we feel today
so all im asking for is one last chance go to the door
and there you'll find out how we make it this last time for sure

ive changed.. not the same.. person thats been around
your gone.. whos to blame.. its my fault we might drownd
you deserve better i can be better let me prove it to you forever and ever
just like we used to say just about every day let me show you how ive changed

i know.. that ive been a fool
and i know.. that i might lose you
but im prayin.. we're hangin by a thread
and im stayin.. i hope you catch my drift

ive changed.. not the same.. person thats been around
your gone.. whos to blame.. its my fault we might drownd
you deserve better i can be better let me prove it to you forever and ever
just like we used to say just about every day let me show you how ive changed
#2
Solid rhythm; whenever someone can hold a rhythm in the lyrics, it can fit to a song and melody, and that's good.

As for the actual lyrics; it's bland, but like I said, you can still make a song out of it.

I'd like to advise you though on spelling and grammar; spelling here is bad, and you miss the odd word out etc. which makes it annoying to read.

Keep writing, and eperiment with the rhythms you can create. It's alot of fun.

The originality will come in time.

Have a good day
#3
thanks man.. if you wanna see how it flows i have it recorded on my myspace and a post about it in the original recordings sub forum
#5
The way it's written,you are to close to the subject. You're getting across what you intend to,but in a top ten country way. I've not listened to it yet but I can hear the Nashville strings and harmonies in my head. Keep writing and trying different attacks on the theme. Listen to Dylan,get nonsense words and write the same thing. Love criticism/hate giving it.
#7
Actually completely different from what I expected. Not my bag either,but it was better than I expected.