the first bars are just riffs of which I dont know whether they are good or how I have to rewrite them to make them work.
but i'm pretty confident with the riffs after that, I just don't know if the transitions are good enough or the rhythm's too awkward.

it's not finished, as you will see.
i'll be happy about any comment.
C4C, as usual. (maybe I will take some time to crit back, pretty busy)
but please, leave link.
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Holy shit nemesis, that was depressing.
Mission accomplished!