#1
C4C


It's just something simple, i wrote it up after a friends experience...

Verse: C9, G, Am, Em
Chorus: C, Am, Em, F, G


The Big Step

[VERSES]
We have been together 18 months
Will you marry me?
Marry me

I’m sorry to say like this
But it’s killing me
Killing me

It’s a yes or no answer
There is no maybe
Maybe

We have been together for so long
Will you stand by me?
Please stand by


[CHORUS]
It’s matter of getting through
To stand side by side
If you are going to go through this
Please say yes

[VERSES]
I don’t know why I asked you, you cheat once
And you’ll cheat me twice
Cheat me twice

I can’t live with awful decisions
Because it repeats in my mind
Which I can’t live with

And if you say yes
Please don’t go behind me back
Behind me

And if you say no, I can live with it
And learn from my mistake
I must take it slowly


[CHORUS x2]
It’s matter of getting through
To stand side by side
If you are going to go through this
Please say yes

Please say yes...
#2
Quote by Kom23
The Big Step

[VERSES]
We have been together 18 months
Will you marry me?
Marry me

I’m sorry to say like this
But it’s killing me
Killing me

It’s a yes or no answer
There is no maybe
Maybe

We have been together for so long
Will you stand by me?
Please stand by This whole verse is one big cliche. It needs some originality in it. Add some metaphors, something that makes you have to guess what it about.


[CHORUS]
It’s matter of getting through
To stand side by side
If you are going to go through this
Please say yes

[VERSES]
I don’t know why I asked you, you cheat once
And you’ll cheat me twice
Cheat me twice I don't know why you put this in. You're sort of contradicting the 'begging' shown in the first verse

I can’t live with awful decisions
Because it repeats in my mind
Which I can’t live with

And if you say yes
Please don’t go behind me back
Behind me

And if you say no, I can live with it
And learn from my mistake
I must take it slowly I quite like this stanza

[CHORUS x2]
It’s matter of getting through
To stand side by side
If you are going to go through this
Please say yes

Please say yes... the constant repeats of 'please say yes' is a bit to blunt.
Way too literal for my taste. But that's just personal preferance. I'd suggest spicing it up a bit and make it a bit more cryptic - don't make the meaning of it so obvious

C4C in sig (preferably the green arrow one)
#3
The verses are a bit catchy, but the chorus feels bland and unexciting. I dunno, it's just that the verses go on for a while, kind of adding suspense, but then when they reach the chorus the song doesn't feel like it's reached a climax.

Personally, from what I've seen, choruses are whether written out like you have it, but much longer, or they're the same thing repeated over and over. My advice to you is just to lengthen the chorus, the rest seems pretty cool.

As for the C4C, open this: https://www.ultimate-guitar.com/forum/showthread.php?t=1230187
Last edited by GreatJallopi at Nov 14, 2009,