#2
I like it alot, its very well structured, and just overrall a good song. I liked the lyrics, I just wish they where louder and more defined. I really love your voice, for being a brit you have a very american voice.

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#3
I'll start off by saying VERY good song man! Everything works together and flows well, it doesn't seem repetitive, and you have a great voice that really fits the style. I hate doing this since it doesn't help you at all, but I honestly can't think of any specific problems with the song. Just keep it up man! Also, on a side note, your voice kind of reminds me of Pearl Jam.
#4
nice intro, like the tone and what the guitar is playing,
voice is nice, but I've already told you that
I didn't like the part that comes in at 01:12 that much, maybe a solo or melody over it?
02:00 what i'm guessing is the chorus, is nice
soothing build-up afterwards
yeah i'm digging the chorus it's good!

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#5
You've gotten a much better sound for the vocals this time around. I guess you moved a bit closer to the mic. Good performance too.

The mix as such is a bit too noisy for my taste. The highs on the drums are piercing so once the hi-hat, snare and cymbals enter it becomes too much. The slightly overdriven guitar has the same problem, it's also too loud in the mix; the vocal gets kind of buried for the chorus.

I would also like to see a little bit of movement in the bass for the second half of the second verse, that would add some much-needed variation while allowing the song to move more effectively towards the chorus. As it is now there's a weird kind of pause that's not really a pause right before the chorus.

Another good song though, it's just that it could be a whole lot better.
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#6
S2Hedgehog - Thanks very much mate, any words are always appreciated!!

Freth - Cheers mate, I'll have a look at chucking in a solo perhaps!

ebon00 - Thanks as always, I went back to basics with an SM58, and sung a lot closer to it. I see what you mean about the cymbals, they are really harsh on the ear, I'll try and add a low pass to that and the guitar.

Do you think I should get rid of that pause then?

Thanks a lot mate