#1
Verse 1

Silently gripping for any sign of life, this cancer is starting to spread.
It's this natural-born disease that is killing me from within.
Why is it that I cant escape from what i most dread?
Like a dog returns to his vomit, I keep coming back again

Chorus

As I come to the full realization of who I am
I know my true power and what I've always been capable of
Now I count it all as loss
For all I can do now is destroy what i love

Verse 2


I struggle to speak, but no words can do justice
For this resentful heart of mine never had the courage to stand up to you
I tell myself this state I'm in will have to suffice
But I know in the back of my head that this is not true

Chorus


As I come to the full realization of who I am
I know my true power and what I've always been capable of
Now I count it all as loss
For all I can do now is destroy what i love

Bridge


Where is your head?
I call for you, but I cant hear you
Where is your heart?
I look for you, but i cant see you
I hear the cries of agony awaiting me below
Dear God please make it stop

Chorus

As I come to the full realization of who I am
I know my true power and what I've always been capable of
Take, take, take my life and hold it in your arms
Break, break, break my heart, break my heart for breaks yours
For I've wronged you.
#2
I didn't particularly like this. I can't exactly point out the errors for some reason. I mean it is very well written and has a very good flow but somehow it just does not jive well with me. I think it might be how you tried to make a basic comparison way more complex than it should have been. And I also think the chorus could be more catchy you know. I see it as just another verse but IMO a chorus is supposed to stand out and this one just did not. Anyways this is all my opinion and I can't find exact moments to back myself up so maybe it just did not catch ME you know. Anyways I would work on it a bit and make the chorus a bit more catchy and perhaps simplify it by perhaps turning down the vocabulary a small bit and regulating the beat a bit more. Anyways thats all the advice I have to offer on this one.

c4c? "The Leaves" or "Rain to Snow" in my sig?