#1
ok so i randomly just had an idea hit me and this is the fruits of my labor of the past five minutes. ok so please critique. (this song compares a relationship with a car ride.... or its supposed to)

V1:
Do you need a ride?
I'll pick you up, because i like to drive
softly fall asleep and we'll drive through the night

V2:
play some music soft and slow
while you look, thoughtfully out the window
lay back relax, and forever we will go

Chorus:
Wake up and look at the stars
maybe their staring back
wondering where we are
watching yellow lines mix with black

Wake up and look towards the stars
maybe their staring back
wondering where we are
lets drive and not look back

V3:
The car broke down, well at least we tried
don't look down see the brighter side
just turn left, and use your eyes.


Chorus


Bridge: (not sure where this belongs but i will stick it here..... for now)

And i'm lost in your eyes, are you lost in mine?
praying I wont blink, I can't waste time
because there's magic in the night, waiting on sunrise

Chorus (2x)
Last edited by Firstnamesmusic at Nov 17, 2009,
#2
this is a cool song and i would say that that is more or less the right place for the bridge.