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Well it's my first time trying to write lyrics. Typically I have my vocalist do it. As for what I can see, it's incredibly cliche, and well...bad. Mind telling me what to fix?
umpin in the deep end
Never seemed so damn scary before
holdin on to my heart
just seems near impossible

and I don't care what they say
im holding you and never letting go
we'll fade into the sunset
tear through my chest let my heart show

well they may say we can't be us
but when stars collide they make stardust

Chorus:
Take my hand I'll hold you tight
We'll fade away into the light
Everyone may say we can't be
**** everyone we'll be you and me
(repeat)

Well how about we turn back the clock
And forget what they say,
I'll whisper to your heart
And we can just hope and pray

Bridge:
That love lasts forever, and that life passes by
Without any sorrows, no chance to cry
We'll live like it's nothing, like it's always been this way
like nothing can ever extinguish this flame

Take my hand I'll hold you tight
We'll fade away into the light
Everyone may say we can't be
Forget everyone we'll be you and me
(repeat chorus)

Like I said, awful for now. As for now I've thought of just an acoustic on the verses, piano and acoustic for the lead into each chorus, guitar, piano, maybe a little synth and drums on the chorus.
Originally Posted by bucktheduck
You think you're any better, swamping in sexual filth with fangs bared and blood red eyes? I see through the cold blood of you reptiles, none of you can do any good to a world that I need to fix.

Apparently, me.