#1
A new song I wrote yesterday...I'm not very pleased with most of it except for the chorus, because that seems to have a nice rhythm (or in my head anyway). Any advice on what to do would be appreciated.

Broken Promises


I remember when I heard you say

I’ll be there when your blue skies turn to grey

When I needed you just the other day

Much to my surprise, you were away

.. ..

I remember, when I saw you next

You tried to think up some lame excuse

You won’t be gone next time I have the blues

I should have known right then, it was just a ruse

.. ..

Cause you let me down once again

And you’ll do it again, who knows when

.. ..

All the things you promised me

They were made to be broken

All the things you said to me

You said to hear yourself talkin’

.. ..

I’ve been told that life is a lonely road

I thought you could help me, not be alone

Life’s tough, and you’d help me share the load

But when I looked back, you never followed

.. ..

You let me down once again

You’d do it again, who knows when

.. ..

All the things you promised me

They were made to be broken

All the words you said to me

They were better left unspoken

All the times you lied to me

I thought you were a better person
#2
I thought it was really good actually. I say keep it as is. It doesn't have to be a deep poetic masterpiece to be a good song (not meant as an insult.) You conveyed your message very well and delivered a few really good lines, so kudos.
#3
It doesn't have to be a deep poetic masterpiece to be a good song

I so strongly agree with this


But anyways i thought this part

I’ve been told that life is a lonely road
I thought you could help me, not be alone
Life’s tough, and you’d help me share the load
But when I looked back, you never followed

and the the last part was awesome. Good job .