#1
On the Line


Verse I
Packin’ my bags the last thing on my mind
Getting away would only take time
All these broken memories takin’ a toll on me

Verse II
Shattered dreams never make believe
How could I ever let this be
Cuz the words that you said taken over me

Chorus x2
Should I be the one left in the street
Knowing that you wouldn’t be my queen
I should have known better than love again
Should I have left love on the line

Verse 3
Maybe we were broken from the start
Never realizing we might fall
Should you really be the one to say we would never have it all

Chorus 2x
#2
This seems like a song a 70's band would have written. These are a pretty nice change from most lyrics I've read/heard recently. I like the chorus, I would definitely keep that how it is. For some reason, the verses don't seem to flow well, probably because the lines all have different syllables. I don't know if this is how it's supposed to be or not, but it doesn't flow well in my head. I would try harder to make the lines closer to the same amount of syllables.