#1
G'day guys,

I'm working on a metalcore song and i'd like some criticism!
It's nowhere near complete, and it's my first attempt at ever making a full metalcore song, so I am looking for suggestions to improve on the transition and also a possible verse after the breakdown.

Cheers.
As always, C4C!
Attachments:
Silence Is Our Medication.gp4
Silence Is Our Medication.gp5
#2
i like what you've done so far, keep it comin!

my only criticism is that the chugging needs to be a little tighter, try removing the ties.
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#3
Hey, thanks for your input champ.

Yeah, my composition is pretty messy, I'll have to work on that soon.