#1
staring at the floor
cant make sense of this anymore
what am i gonna do
life has spun me around
showing me im a fool

Dont make that mistake again
thats what i tell myself
keep your head up high
reach up and grab the sky
hold it in your hand
make it ur biggest fan

smile with joy
it is my favorite toy
My newest cover Rivers Of Babylon sublime style.

http://m.youtube.com/watch?v=J_E7iWLxmiA


My gear:
taylor 310
Fender strat MiM
Cry Baby-GCB-95
Tone port ux2
tascam dp4
80s rock, classic rock, classic metal
#2
Yeah, it's kind of good for a song except in the second paragraph you would need to change the last four lines, and the last paragraph needs to be less childish if your not make a childish song, other than that good work, would like to see it bigger and completed.
#3
Quote by FallenLeaves
Yeah, it's kind of good for a song except in the second paragraph you would need to change the last four lines, and the last paragraph needs to be less childish if your not make a childish song, other than that good work, would like to see it bigger and completed.


I agree. It seems from what you have so far you could make this into a pretty good song with a few tweaks here and there. The first paragraph was good at grabbing my attention. Good job. C4C?
https://www.ultimate-guitar.com/forum/showthread.php?t=1234165