#1
This is an acoustic song I've just started writing. Playing around on my guitar, and we'll see how it turns out.. Might add some piano or beat to it.
Normally I don't have much problems writing songs, but this is giving me a headache;

"Hey there hello, I can see you looking straight at me,
Why do you turn around with your head on the ground,
And pretend there's nothing you can see?

I've got a heart and I've got a soul, I'm not just an empty shell
I'm new around here, I don't really fit in
I'm an outside in my own skin.

Feel out of sync with the rest of the world, like a zebra in a tree,
With my feet on the ground, I want to go round
To find someone that sees me."

What do you honestly think of it so far? Any help is appreciated, thank you.
#3
Really nice so far, finish soon! I like the zebra in a tree simile and the i'm an outside in my own skin they work very well and show a lot of creativity. Song so far sounds like something I would listen to, so please finish and record if you do that kinda stuff.
My name is Jack.