#1
never said he wanted
to be part of this war
drafted when he didn't want to go
chosen not for more
couldn't decide
the side just to be
to be part of something else
but was ripped from his family

if only he could speak his own will
he'd quit not to kill
not a man of blood
but one of tears
to hear them cry
and see other's fail
what was really caused?
no one could tell

a heart not meant
to fight others
but to keep peace
with all of his brothers
the life he lived
ruined only once
couldn't go back
till freedom rung

saw the bodies
bullet shells
hears the screams
emotions felt
couldn't take it
shot himself
regrets getting others hurt
as his body fell

if only he could speak his own will
he'd quit not to kill
not a man of blood
but one of tears
to hear them cry
and see other's fail
what was really caused?
no one could tell

a heart not meant
to fight others
but to keep peace
with all of his brothers
the life he lived
ruined only once
never went back
now he's gone


i kinda wrote this after me and my friend finished playing gears of war 2 and then talk about how being a soldier sucked. kinda has some referral to the game as in when tai shot himself and when dom left maria and then had to kill her. my bands trying to piece it together with a tear making solo and soft choruses. any help can be offered
#3
Quote by sgc09
any feedback on the song or anything would be nice


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comments on this piece; I just felt it lacked a personal touch and thus it lacked emotion. I didn't feel anything for the soldier.
#4
I didn't feel anything for the soldier.


neither did I. I actually found it insulting it was so bad, but it makes perfect sense that you wrote it after playing a dumb video game.