#1
Could you kill the one you love,
When no one showed the meaning of?
Cut off from,
To rip a heart,
An end must come,
after each start.

Cannot forgive anyone,
For we have sinned,
Love has ended,
For what had been.
We couldn't take it anymore,
So the things we loved,
We could neveradore.

From the start,
A clock has ticked,
To count the moments,
Til the end.
The words to say,
Cannot describe,
How no one meant,
to make each other cry.

To leave without,
another word,
To never look,
at the one you hurt,
To go away,
And never look back,
Goodbye to you,
the red turns black.
Last edited by sgc09 at Nov 30, 2009,
#4
Nice. Like the rhyming pattern.
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#5
i really like this, its great,but i did make a few minor suggestions

Quote by sgc09
Could you kill the one you love,
When no one showed the meaning of?
Cut off from,
To rip a heart,
An end must come,
after each start. (its good but, i think it would flow better with after the start)

Cannot forgive anyone,
For we have sinned,
Love has ended,
For what had been. (for what has been??)
We couldn't take it anymore, (couldnt take it anymore)
So the things we loved,
We could never adore.

From the start,
A clock has ticked,
To count the moments,
Til the end.
The words to say,
Cannot describe,
How no one meant,
to make each other cry. (to make them cry??)

To leave without,
another word,
To never look,
at the one you hurt,
To go away,
And never look back,
Goodbye to you,
the red turns black.
Sorry if Ive offended some kind of Punk God I should brush up on my Commandments of Punk maybe copy down the Punk Bible a few thousand times so I don't forget again sorry for my error O Punk Master Of All Things That Are Punk .