#1
Just started writting lyrics, tell us what you think.

Behind a wall of emptiness
I've began to be build
I'm trapped inside a mind
I can no longer control

Deep down inside me there's
A master pulling at my strings
Tempting me too do it once again
My skin now filled with love that I hate

Never feel better
Never taste better
It never feels any better
It never tastes any better

I Fix it up, shoot it up,
Drink it up, swallow it down
Snort it up, feel alive
Come and feel the embrace
Where did my time go

Never feel better
Never taste better
It never feels any better
It never tastes any better

No one put fate into my hands
It was me who made that decision
To take this poison I have received
These filthy bruises from the marks
Are keeping me awake at night
#2
At first this piece seemed kind of bland and didn't really catch my attention. The first two paragraphs just don't seem to have a nice flow. But, all the succeeding paragraphs were excellent. Just do a little work on the first couple of paragraphs; maybe rhyme them. I'm also not quite sure what you are trying to say with the second line. Overall this is a good piece and just needs some small changes here and there to make it excellent.

C4C?
https://www.ultimate-guitar.com/forum/showthread.php?t=1233756&highlight=broken+promised
#4
i like it, i agree that the first bit needs a little something to be perfect, and the chorus is slightly repetitive but altogether its very cool and would sound great
Sorry if Ive offended some kind of Punk God I should brush up on my Commandments of Punk maybe copy down the Punk Bible a few thousand times so I don't forget again sorry for my error O Punk Master Of All Things That Are Punk .