#1
i tried so hard to get away from it all
and lord knows ive got to change
i start to get clean and then i fall
and loosing your soul is all the rage
another day wasted another day gone
another day left all alone

this needle is breaking into my skin
i tried to stop it and couldnt fly free
so i could forget the hell that im in
just for a moment and this is killing me

oh god i want to get off
but ive got to get away from this pain
i break free when ive had enough
but then i do it again
and i want out from this
i want out, i cant take myself

this needle is breaking into my skin
i tried to stop it and couldnt fly free
so i could forget the hell that im in
just for a moment and this is killing me
Sorry if Ive offended some kind of Punk God I should brush up on my Commandments of Punk maybe copy down the Punk Bible a few thousand times so I don't forget again sorry for my error O Punk Master Of All Things That Are Punk .
Last edited by BrandyCross at Dec 6, 2009,
#2
i really dig this." losing your soul is all the rage,another day wasted,another day gone,another day left all alone." The imagery on that really hits home...boy i tell ya what if i had a dollar for everytime i felt like that.The whole thing it's beautiful in its brutal honesty.me likey dj want wingy
#3
It was good, but kind of bland in parts.

this needle is breaking into my skin
i tried to stop it and couldnt break free

I didn't like the use of break here. Only because it's used twice, so close together. The lines themselves are nice, though.

i tried so hard to get away from it all
and lord knows ive got to change
i start to get clean and then i fall

My favorite part in the piece. It really displayed the hopelessness of it.

Overall a pretty nice piece, could use a little editing though C: