Poll: Who wins?
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View poll results: Who wins?
Red
9 47%
Blue
2 11%
Coded
8 42%
Voters: 19.
#1
One vote. Good luck all


January

my fingers stretch and
quiver with excitement
as I'm about to rip "January"
off my bedroom wall
aye,
an eye for an eye,
i think, as january
peeled off every layer
of onion skin it could find
on my superfluous body
and then some more

it revealed, well,
marching thoughts, a
circular
parade

tomorrow marks
the beginning of
a new stratum
in abstract concept
planetarium
a tablecloth?
deprived and,
well, poor
in which I'm supposed to wake with
a sudden miracle recipe,
if I can chose I'd take
someone who can
take me as I am,
with clear eyes and
a soft touch.

my mind quivers
as my fingers rip
and tear january,
calmly put it out
with used tissues in the trash,
i believe in finality
and simplicity,
yes, I slide between the sheets
with a figurative foot
in hopeful february



--Almost---

... and there's a flutter where my mind once was.
A chill racks my bones,
indistinguishable from the
shakes and rustles of my nervous tongue,
beating its way through the bushes of
lost lungs and cold shoulders.

I've coughed my way through love songs;
I've whispered sweet nothings
only to have the moisture on my voice
freeze over your ear drums;
and shatter you into deafness.

I've never had the patience to learn
another language, let alone
finger dancing through sentences
about undying love that I probably
will never feel again.

God, I miss you.
I'll always despise winter
for taking you away.
I know, I know...
you still lie next to me,
every morning when I wake up.
For that brief moment, I almost
forget the car accident that
shattered you.
I almost forget the black ice that
ripped you from my breast.
I almost forgive old man winter
for striking you deaf and dumb.
Almost.



we thought
(you hoped
i prayed)
if we tilt our heads and squint our eyes,
maybe the dying ashes would start
to fall with the grace of snowflakes
dancing on the sleek attire of the frozen lake,

and the prickle of the stabbing heat
springing out against the icy night
would start to
slowly
fre
e
z
e
and harden into the ivy ring
around the moon.

and maybe
maybe the distant
(screeeeeeeeeeeams)
would be nothing but the whistling wind
singing carols to the choir
of frowns, slowly trembling
into smiles

around the fire
oh, the gently crackling fire...

and as smoked filled our lungs
our minds were somewhere higher.
#2
I thought the last was the best if it only didnt seem so damn gimmicked. honestly, that freeze makes me sick. Also, the first had more original imagery I felt. Either way *voted*
#3
Quote by #1 synth
I thought the last was the best if it only didnt seem so damn gimmicked. honestly, that freeze makes me sick. Also, the first had more original imagery I felt. Either way *voted*


It's a shame your prose didn't get more attention. Probably too long of a read. Contests is like the fast food of poetry around here.

It needs a bit of polishing, either a little expanding on the waiter's character imo or some tweaking to shorten it down a bit. It was kind of in between for me, but definitely enough to win my votes for this comp.

you're one of the few people who actually experience a lot with styles, which I'm hoping to start doing more and more.
#4
Quote by circular.parade
It's a shame your prose didn't get more attention. Probably too long of a read. Contests is like the fast food of poetry around here.

It needs a bit of polishing, either a little expanding on the waiter's character imo or some tweaking to shorten it down a bit. It was kind of in between for me, but definitely enough to win my votes for this comp.

you're one of the few people who actually experience a lot with styles, which I'm hoping to start doing more and more.


Lol.
#7
Quote by circular.parade
It's a shame your prose didn't get more attention. Probably too long of a read. Contests is like the fast food of poetry around here.

It needs a bit of polishing, either a little expanding on the waiter's character imo or some tweaking to shorten it down a bit. It was kind of in between for me, but definitely enough to win my votes for this comp.

you're one of the few people who actually experience a lot with styles, which I'm hoping to start doing more and more.


Wasn't his prose. haha.
#8
went with coded.

enjoyed it more, some of that presentation was overkill. should have ended on the crackling fire line.