#2
I love your lyrics, really good. Rather depressing but great imagery and the guitar part suits the song really well. Theres a tenderness to your voice that really relates to the lyrics
The title reminded me of a classic zep song (what is and what should never be) which cant be bad can it
well done!
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Last edited by ell2003 at Dec 7, 2009,
#3
youre guitar's a little out of tune. find a tuner. Your vox are also off key alot (sounds like you have a faint idea of what the vocal melody should be but you keep going on and off of it); try singing louder. Tracking the vocals and guitar separately might help you with this. Lyrics are decent, very appropriate for the progression. Keep this up, this and the Dylan-style song you posted have alot of potential.

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