#1
just a darkness..a promise land
it hold nothing in it seeds
sacrafices to make it a part of me

take it a part..till its all just sand
become its heart..become this land
your suffering shall be gone
become a part of me we flow in to one..

I need to be some thing more
These seeds are empy no more
The light is shining but we cant really see
Ive done what you asked now thaaake me

and so i crack this soil again and I..m
dried up im past the point OF my
Pain and suffering to be part of me
Salvation...

I need to be some thing more
These seeds are empy no more
The light is shining but we cant really see
Ive done what you asked now thaaake me

this tragity i watch by
your nothing but dead to me
and i ask myself why
this inside of me
this pain i seek
seems to set me free

and these lights seem to die away
left in the darkness guided by..what i feel
this crack in the soil brings me to my
dried up past this is the point to my
savation..surely this is the end to my pain
the end to why i feel so ****ed up inside

Its still vary rough just wrote it wile i was in here C4C Any criticism is welcomed
Need help making my songs better so dont go easy on me
Last edited by gord69961 at Dec 7, 2009,
#2
It suits the Alternative Metal genre and it's not bad at all... However, these types of lyrics are too straight forward for me... I prefer lyrics that revolve around about more cryptic meanings, insanity,
love, all that Alt Rock stuff... Think Pixes-esque lyrics... Back to your lyrics... They're pretty good... Just don't start writing Puddle of Mudd type stuff... Listen to their song Spaceship lol...
#3
Quote by Cole419
It suits the Alternative Metal genre and it's not bad at all... However, these types of lyrics are too straight forward for me... I prefer lyrics that revolve around about more cryptic meanings, insanity,
love, all that Alt Rock stuff... Think Pixes-esque lyrics... Back to your lyrics... They're pretty good... Just don't start writing Puddle of Mudd type stuff... Listen to their song Spaceship lol...


thx for the Crit ya its my first time writing these kind of lyrics i defiantly dont wanna go puddle of mudd style lol im make sure to change it upp a lil thx alot