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#81
no offense here, but you can basically scrap that thing. There is no real structure and every part seems to be completely random. Also, why did you write your very first song in 3/4 time? it makes things even harder. 3/4 itself doesn't really work in metal, you either have to make it sound like triplets in a 12/8 or you just go with the usual 4/4 time.
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#82
Quote by thorbor
no offense here, but you can basically scrap that thing. There is no real structure and every part seems to be completely random. Also, why did you write your very first song in 3/4 time? it makes things even harder. 3/4 itself doesn't really work in metal, you either have to make it sound like triplets in a 12/8 or you just go with the usual 4/4 time.


Fair enough, it was written a while back and it was just the way I could make each bit fit into the bars by putting it into 3/4 tbh.
I didn't expect great things from it lol.
#84
Quote by huevos
I echo thorbor's sentiments. 3/4 doesn't work in straight-forth metal most of the time. It can work, but it's usually not for the 3ntire song if it is in e/4.
****ing JD.

Anywas. What I'm I supposed to do with this?
tat thing doesn't even make sense to me either

it was hard to get into, I didn't recognise the first guitar as tripletrs right away and it seemed off to me, but know I got it. The pause at bar10 for the first guitar put me off, it interrupts the flow and you should fill something in there.

In the clean part at the beginning, the rhythm guitar made no sense to me. Just like randomly picking some chords. I don't mean the chord choice but the rhythm, it's just impossible to get. Basically you don't know which track to listen to, it really needs drums or at least some kind of percussion.

The transition to teh verse thign as horrible, just what you would call bad. The pauses in the 2 acoustic guitars put me off again. The few notes that are there are great so why does it have to stop?

The more then likely removing this-part was actually pretty good.

Verse 2 is again hard to get. Your rhythm in this piece is just too strange. It seems that you've tried to hard to use awkward rhythms and time signatures and failed after all.

The riff at the end is quite cool but comes out of nowhere, lacking a transition and any relation to the previous parts. Might as well save that for another song.

I don't know what to say about that, it's just completely random to me.
You could still take a look at the thing I pasted earlier, a few posts back.
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#85
3/4 works great for stuff like Opeth, for black metal, and for several other things in Metal - I don't believe the time signature is the greatest culprit here, moreso a misunderstanding of the time signature that you're using - the first riff sounds like it'S meant to be in 4/4 to feel natural, and the second riff basically cheats your time signature to be in 4/4 time - the Chorus on the other hand actually is in 3/4 and sounds, well, not great, just fine to me, but thinking that it doesn't work because it's in 3/4 is not the best way to see things... if anything it might be limiting to your use and understanding of time signatures, to see certain things as do and dont's within a certain style.
#86
That piece was something I just jammed out a while back. The format I put it in was the closest I could get to what I was actually playing, as it was a random tapping spasm that came out of me.
The segue I made up in GP, as well as the overdriven part in the 2nd Verse. The segue is cool, but I don't like that transition.

I wouldn't say I tried too hard (on awkward rhythms), as this is what came out.

I was thinking of remaking the song around the VoM riff, but I would just end up making the VoM.

From the comments, I can see the title is appropriate. It's also a reference to Don Caballero. They are like the gold standard of math rock. Pretty much synonymous with the genre.
Which gets me thinking, I should rewrite this as a straight forth math rock piece.

Oh and I wasn't cursing at you up there JD, I was talking about Gentleman Jack from Tennessee.


thorbor-Wasn't sure if that was your piece until I heard it. The funk is undeniable, yet again. The 1st riff sounds a bit groove metalish given the syncopation. Not a bad riff, but it pales in comparison to the cleverly disguised bass line. How do y'all make bass lines that work in sacrosanct with the other instruments, yet follow their own path?
I got some pointers from this one Madea dude on here (fantastic bebop writer), but I'm not trooly familiar with the concept of the walking bass line.

Hella. Yeah, if you think my piece is ridiculous, listen to any of their songs. I think my song is way too tame when standing against their monstrosities (awesome monstrosities, of course).
Last edited by huevos at Feb 11, 2010,
#87
@ jazz I wasn't saying the song was bad because of the time signatures, at least not for the biggest part. It's just strange to start a first song in 3/4 while 4/4 is much easier.

@Huevos and everyone else interested, this is from one of my older threads, like 8 9 months old or something. Really helped me writing basslines. And yes, I had to keep the last sentence in there for an ego-boost

Quote by icronic
Writing cool basslines: I'm pretty sure you liked my Troubled Tale.... song. all I really did to write those basslines was figure out the chords I was playing, and then build a bassline based off the Root 3rd 5th and 7th of that chord. The root (and it's octave) and the fifth are going to be the strong notes though. You can also do chromatic walks into those notes.

The rest is just timing really. I'd suggest setting up some kind of drum beat, looping it, and then just messing around on your guitar till you get something you want. Best way to come up with something that sounds like it belongs as a bass part is to use your fingers instead of a pick.

Anyway, I'm not sure if any of that will help at all, but hopefully it does.

Now... To go through your drum track and steal ideas... mwahaha.
of course, you have to find your own style and you have to have ideas to begin with. For that song you listened to, I started out with the drums. I bascially had the drums in mind before I even got onto the computer. Everything else just came naturally, I didn't even plan to go into that direction.

Basically, if you look at icronics basslines, often it's only the root and the octaves, played in a good rhythm. I don't even know if you can actually learn how to write good rhythm, I guess you just have to have a good feeling for that.

Another thing that works great for clean, softer songs is, playing around with m7 and m7M chords.
For example have the guitar playing something based on Fm7, F G# C D#
and have the bass play around with F and E, one of them one octave higher.

But you may not like it since that was was I mainly did in the song I submitted last time

edit: yay for grammar edits in the evening
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Last edited by thorbor at Feb 11, 2010,
#88
I've got a lot of this song figured out but I'm stuck on where to go with it. I need basslines added and any fills on lead guitar basically everything. I've got the skeleton of the song for the most part but it needs to be tweaked by someone more knowledgable than I.

It's kind of a dark ballad style I guess. I also have another one that needs some bass lines added and some additional lead. I'll post that one when I finish the drum track. Help would be greatly appreciated! If you have a good idea for percussion for Hello From Hell feel free to add it (or anything else for that matter).

Okay the other song is added as well now.

For clarity....

"Hello From Hell" needs a bass line and work on structure as well as additional lead and percussion.

"Formally Speaking" needs a bassline throughout. I've completed only a portion of the bass line (bars 25-32). It also needs some additional lead fills and outro the lead I wrote for it needs an ending, could just solo all the way out if you want.
Attachments:
Hello From Hell.gp5
Formally Speaking.gp5
Last edited by testekleez at Feb 11, 2010,
#89
Got one more and I can't figure out where to go from this intro. Strumming just doesn't seem right. Anybody wanna take a stab at making something out of this?
Attachments:
Moonrise Street.gp5
#90
alright, working on them, will post something later on. What I can say now is that Hello From Hell sounds good but is still far from beeing finished. There are also some typical greenhorn mistakes in there. (googled that one but it doesn't feel right, anybody got a better word for this? )

alright, first one is done. I shortened the intro, was way too long. Having 3 guitars playing exactly the same isn't just a waste of potential but it also screws up guitar pro's sound.
I also tweaked a solo section, the thing you had there was just ultra cliche and somewhat predictable, you have to avoid that thing with 2 dotted and 1 normal note.
Now, I didn't work on the last part because I can't be arsed to write in 3/4
Seriously though, it's too long and to boring, even with a solo over it. You can maybe keep that for a couple of bars and then come up with another riff, then use the riff with the distortion guitar again at the end.

now, starting with teh 2nd song.

edit3: haha testekleez, you really gotta work on your rhythmic feel. Didn't you notice that moonrise street is just plain 4/4? if the 3/4 and 2/4 was planned, noone will actually get it and it will still feel like 4/4. And I wont go thorugh the track and make everything right, that's your work

The other 2 songs are not my style though, I write anything for them and right after writing a good bassline I cant be arsed to write another one right away.
Attachments:
Hello From Hell.gp5
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Last edited by thorbor at Feb 12, 2010,
#91
Quote by thorbor
alright, working on them, will post something later on. What I can say now is that Hello From Hell sounds good but is still far from beeing finished. There are also some typical greenhorn mistakes in there. (googled that one but it doesn't feel right, anybody got a better word for this? )

alright, first one is done. I shortened the intro, was way too long. Having 3 guitars playing exactly the same isn't just a waste of potential but it also screws up guitar pro's sound.
I also tweaked a solo section, the thing you had there was just ultra cliche and somewhat predictable, you have to avoid that thing with 2 dotted and 1 normal note.
Now, I didn't work on the last part because I can't be arsed to write in 3/4
Seriously though, it's too long and to boring, even with a solo over it. You can maybe keep that for a couple of bars and then come up with another riff, then use the riff with the distortion guitar again at the end.

now, starting with teh 2nd song.

edit3: haha testekleez, you really gotta work on your rhythmic feel. Didn't you notice that moonrise street is just plain 4/4? if the 3/4 and 2/4 was planned, noone will actually get it and it will still feel like 4/4. And I wont go thorugh the track and make everything right, that's your work

The other 2 songs are not my style though, I write anything for them and right after writing a good bassline I cant be arsed to write another one right away.


Hey I appreciate it man! The bass is cool and I like what you did with the solo part. I agree the 3/4 part is boring and way too long lol. Thanks for the pointers. Moonrise is in a screwed up time signature because I must have erased the original gp file and all I had of it was the midi so I imported it and that's how GP wrote it (I was too lazy to change it lol).

Thanks man! I'll work out some kinks and see if I can't come up with a better arrangement. For the other tune, that's cool man I can't expect you to do everything for me lol.
Last edited by testekleez at Feb 12, 2010,
#92
Quote by testekleez
Got one more and I can't figure out where to go from this intro. Strumming just doesn't seem right. Anybody wanna take a stab at making something out of this?


You can help yourself a lot if you have a clear notation.

Where to go from here... sorry, but it's almost 11pm here, so can't help you with that now.

Here's a different (I'm not saying for sure that this is the correct way of) notation:
Attachments:
Moonrise Street[1].gp5
#93
I've been working on this in the last few days.

I'm having troubles mainly with the drums, especially in the solo part (there's going to a 16 bar solo after bridge also but that'll come later), but I don't know whether the drums in the chorus, bridge, outro and ending are good or not since I know too few about drums as a guitarist.

Also the bass line during the solo... I'm usually fine with the bass when it's about following a guitar riff, but I'm clueless when it comes to solos. Any ideas on that?
Attachments:
akkord19_3_alt_bridge.gp5
Last edited by atira at Feb 12, 2010,
#94
Quote by atira
You can help yourself a lot if you have a clear notation.

Where to go from here... sorry, but it's almost 11pm here, so can't help you with that now.

Here's a different (I'm not saying for sure that this is the correct way of) notation:



Right on. Hey that works man, thanks! Oh and your drum beat isn't bad at all it just needs to be cleaned up a bit. Not bad at all for a noodler actually. The bass sounds good too to me. I know a little about drums but probably not enough to help with that type of beat.

I was actually about to work on that notation issue but we got a fair amount of snow for the area and it threw my plans off a bit.

I tweaked Hello From Hell a little, but I'm still not sure it's the right way to go. Tweaked the bass and changed the arrangement and shortened it significantly lol.

Is it any better now?
Attachments:
Hello From HellRV.gp5
Last edited by testekleez at Feb 12, 2010,
#95
so, drums are done. Really cool song you got there, just a bit short. Good feeling and the solos are cool too. Like the bass in there.

edit: @ testekleez. Another typical mistake with the bass now. I arranged it as a full instrument which plays a bit melody too, while you seem to think that the bass HAS to play the chord tone on beat 1 of every bar.
If you do that, each bar stands for it's own and there's no real connection between them. With the E in bar 11 you totally erased the feeling I set up with the G in the previous bar.
If you want a special bassline that will be remembered by the listener, you totally have to change the bass back.
Attachments:
akkord19_3_alt_bridge.gp5
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Last edited by thorbor at Feb 13, 2010,
#97
Quote by thorbor
so, drums are done. Really cool song you got there, just a bit short. Good feeling and the solos are cool too. Like the bass in there.


This is pure awesomeness, thanks!
There will be more, I want to add at least a 16 bar solo after the bridge.

One more thing: do you know some resource (url, book etc.) where I could learn some drum/percussion theory?
#98
Quote by atira
This is pure awesomeness, thanks!
There will be more, I want to add at least a 16 bar solo after the bridge.

One more thing: do you know some resource (url, book etc.) where I could learn some drum/percussion theory?
there actually is theory for it? haha, just grab your favorite bands and listen to the drums man, nothing better than that. After a while you will know what to do and what not to do. If you listen to closely you will notice some kind of patterns though. I mean things like intro riff with open hi hats, verse riff with closed hi hats and solo/bridge with ride as the leading cymbal.
You just have to get a feel for it, and I think I have that

also, you guys should check out the thing I posted on the last page called #35.
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#99
Quote by thorbor
there actually is theory for it? haha, just grab your favorite bands and listen to the drums man, nothing better than that. After a while you will know what to do and what not to do. If you listen to closely you will notice some kind of patterns though. I mean things like intro riff with open hi hats, verse riff with closed hi hats and solo/bridge with ride as the leading cymbal.
You just have to get a feel for it, and I think I have that

also, you guys should check out the thing I posted on the last page called #35.


Well okay, you're not the first one to give such advice so I'll just do that

Last page of what and what #35?
#100
Quote by atira
Well okay, you're not the first one to give such advice so I'll just do that

Last page of what and what #35?


It's a song/gp5 file. Pretty cool like a jazz fusion kinda thing.
#101
actually I was working at it for the last 2 hours or so and it really turned messy now. I have to fix some things first and might post it tomorrow (3am here)
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#102
I have this kinda idea for a song.
But I think it sounds awfully boring now due to the lack of drums, and I can't really put what I hear in my head into GP. So if someone could possibly try to put som drums on this, it would be awesome. No need for RSE
Attachments:
aal.gp5
#103
alright here it is. It was pretty difficult for me to write drums for that, I mean that song is kinda strange. It could be that you had completely different drum patterns in mind but overall I like what I have tabbed out. The drums are for midi now, rse sounded really bad for the guitars. You also have to adjust the volumes again sicne I'm currently listening with headphones.
Attachments:
aal-1.gp5
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#104
Thanks dude!

Not exactly what I had in mind but that was great.
I had forgotten about that part labeled groove.
It was just some random stuff I threw in there to see if it worked, but it sounded kinda cool. now. Thanks alot
Last edited by geoguitar at Feb 14, 2010,
#105
EDIT: Post removed because I figured out what to do with my song. But, post kept to say I'll still stick around here and help.
Last edited by Macabre_Turtle at Feb 16, 2010,
#106
Quote by Macabre_Turtle
It'd be great if somebody could help me go somewhere with this. I really love the last two riffs, and feel like it could go somewhere really awesome, but I can't seem to figure it out. I'm losing the momentum no matter what I put after it.
I'll try to help someone else in here so I don't seem like a moocher.

Make riff from the last part, some break part, then go back to old riffs, add solo or something and it's done .
#107
Hey I'm back again
Here's another little riff/song I've been working on since, well this morning really.
I'm sort of lost with it really. I like what's there, although maybe the bassline could be a little more interesting, although I'm not sure the song really calls for it.

My main problems here are:
I'm completley stumped for a drum track, so any help with that would be great.
I'm also a bit lost for direction now. I feel the song would get boring if I went back to one of the exisiting riffs but I'm not sure how to keep the interest.

Sorry if it seems like I'm mooching a bit, I do try to help others but I rarely know what to say!!! haha, so any help will be appreciated and I will c4c or help where I can of course

PS. Hopefully this song is better recieved than my last attempt =P
Attachments:
Song1.gp5
#109
Quote by Macabre_Turtle
Did you mean to tab that in a drop tuning?


Oh crap! Yeah I tabbed it in another GP file when it was all in Drop D, moved the bass and guitar part to another GP file to upload onto here and forgot to change the tunings. Thanks for noticing.
#110
^I liked the intro quite a bit, but the rest of the song is awful, just scrap that. I mean, it's not like you would lose anything, the first chord progression is pretty generic and can be tabbed out in a few seconds again.
I don't really know anything about chords, but that chord you build on the E sounds horrible in that progression. You could use the gallop rhythm thing in a metal song, but it doesn'T fir in there.

A few months ago, I tried to introduce a freind of mine into writing with guitar pro. He wasn't really that good at guitar, but he has been playing for 2-3 years or so. Everything he has come up with soudns mroe or less the same, he just build overused and generic chord progressions with no rhythm and all and maybe put some crappy melody in it. He even had some obviously wrong and horrible sounding notes in there and still insisted on doing that.

I don't want to offend on you and that may sound too harsh, but what I'm trying to say is when you listened at this song before uploading, haven't you noticed that it's just "bad", except the intro?

Even if you're just building simple chord progressions at this level, you should add some rhythm to it. Try out this:
You start a song with tempo=120bpm. You pick something along the lines of eminor as the main key (I usually don't write in a key, just loosely based on e-something). I don't know if you know the key, but you can basically use 0-2-3-5-7-9-10 on the E A and D strings, more or less. Just play around and change a note if it doesn't seem to fit in.

So I suggest you pick frets 3 5 and 7. Now put 16 16th pauses in one bar and more or less randomly put some notes in there.
Eventually there will be something that gets you interested, something that reminds you of a lick you have heard somewhere etc. And then You must have an idea. If you don't know what to do at that point, do something else and come back later.

edt: for example, here is my very first song, the first time I ever even thought about writing something original. I never really played some new things on my guitar, just covered riffs.
Attachments:
#1.gp5
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Last edited by thorbor at Feb 15, 2010,
#111
By the way there is such a thing as drum/percussion theory, and it is in basis the workings of rhythmic theory in general, it is extremely important to grasp the concept of that and to understand time signatures to create solid rhythmic foundations to a song - whether it be subconscious or conscious when you write music. The beat accentuations, the feeling you give, the cymbal punches, etc, will really make the difference between a song that glues together well and a song that sounds disjointed.
#112
please, if anyone can help me, I'm totally stuck in the middle of a solo. Bar 1 is just the transition to it, the solo itself starts at bar 2.
So the first 2 bars of the solo sound really good to me, I like the bluesy feel, but, for some reason it's impossible for me to go from there. I tried multiple ways to continue it but nothing works. The seconf half of the 3rd bar is one of them, I guess.

I just need a few notes to work from, I don't need and don't want a complete solo written here. Maybe someone can chew a lick in there, that's all what I'm asking for

Also, I'm making the assumption that Huevos will like this piece when it's finally done.
Attachments:
#35 1.gp5
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#114
hey i need some help Big time
I'm trying to write a really dramatic song like call-of-ktulu
(metallica just in case people dunno)
And all my riffs seem to hit dead ends so i'd like some help please
Oh and a hammetty solo would be appreciated
Attachments:
C-O-K like.gp5
#115
I've had this one for a while now but I've just been completely stuck for ideas after the last part. If someone could maybe help me out with a bass line and maybe some rhythm adjustments at the end, it would be a big help. Thanks guys.
Attachments:
Softly Softly Catchy Monkey.gp5
Last edited by SOADisdabest at Feb 19, 2010,
#118
Could anyone give a stab at writing some drums for this part? I gave it some attempts myself but I couldn't get it down at all!

Only thing I had in mind is that the drums be somewhat crazy/chaotic (especially for the first riff) and that the "Inter" part have a bit of drum fill part going on there.

But really whatever you see fit would be fine!

Thanks
Attachments:
spiders_drumhelp.gp5
#119
Quote by Kirborg
Could anyone give a stab at writing some drums for this part? I gave it some attempts myself but I couldn't get it down at all!

Only thing I had in mind is that the drums be somewhat crazy/chaotic (especially for the first riff) and that the "Inter" part have a bit of drum fill part going on there.

But really whatever you see fit would be fine!

Thanks

I had a shot, but I wasn't feeling too inspired today. I got stuck at the fill, so it's only the first two riffs. I'm personally not too happy with it, but I didn't want to let my effort be a total waste =/
Attachments:
spiders_drumhelp.gp5
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#120
Quote by entity0009
I had a shot, but I wasn't feeling too inspired today. I got stuck at the fill, so it's only the first two riffs. I'm personally not too happy with it, but I didn't want to let my effort be a total waste =/


awesome! I think it's great! I made some small modifications to it but it is loads better then what I previously had haha