#1
This is the first song I've actually liked that I've written in the past few months, ironically in math class (where I get my best ideas) so tell me what you think. And go easy on me, ok?

Verse 1
Im so contradicted
from these self-inflicted
debts to be paid
promises to be made

Shoot me up and shoot me down
trust me babe I wont make a sound (hold out the "I wont make a sound")
Im not the type of guy to put up a fight
for a dying cause

Chorus
Close your eyes
dont open till the morning sky
We'll both watch it die
fade away into the night
cause this is what I have to say
about all of the wasted days
cleaning up your mess:
I could care less

Verse 2
Is this your life's story?
Skinny jeans and faded glory
The records skipping and its
skipping over you

2'nd part of verse 2
(I forgot the paper at school)
(upload the last part tommorrow)

Chorus
Close your eyes
Dont open till the morning sky
We'll both watch it die
Fade away into the night
Cause this is what I have to say
about all of the wasted days
cleaning up your mess:
I could care less

Bridge
Right the wrongs and wrong the rights
I should have buried you that night
oh that night

Makin piece, fallin to pieces
fallin to pieces
fall to your knees

Vocal solo
Close your eyes
Don't open till the morning sky
We'll both watch it die
Fade away into the night....

Last Chorus
Close your eyes
Dont open till the morning sky
We'll both watch it die
Fade away into the night
Cause this is what I have to say
about all of the wasted days
cleaning up your mess
I could care less (all instruments cut out right before "care less")

So what do you think?
Plus last time I uploaded this someone locked it on me saying "next time read the rules" so before someone does that this time can they explain to me why?
#2
I think it might be that you actually couldn't care less

Good lyrics, imo. I quite like the chorus
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#3
Quote by 23dannybhoy23
I think it might be that you actually couldn't care less

Good lyrics, imo. I quite like the chorus


Lol you've got a good point.
#4
Something really bothers me about the line "don't open til the morning sky". I feel like there should be a "them" in there somewhere.
I'm an asshole.
#5
Quote by lookpizza
Something really bothers me about the line "don't open til the morning sky". I feel like there should be a "them" in there somewhere.

Ya but then it kinda sounds weird, like your trying to stuff to many words in one line.