#2
hey man heres my crit

bar 1 - 24
i liked the drums , really had a sort of indian feel to it.

bar 25 - 46
liked the transtiotion , and it got an even bigger indian feel to it.

bar 47 - 65
really liked it , nothing more to say than that really

bar 66 - 84
sounded good , but wasnt really special


overall i liked it , allthough it was a little short , good melodies and a good structure.

could you crit any of my songs ? there in my sig
#3
Hmmm. Indianic. (is that a word?)

I think you could make the intro even more tribal if you add some 16th note fills here and there.

You know at bars 17 - 23, you can use the mixer (little green and red box on the right side of the toolbar) to create a more flowing fade effect.

41.
DRASTIC TURN
i love it.

I like how your riffs are heavy, but still melodic enough to sound...pleasing...
You know, not make me want to rip someones arms off.

65.
Who doesn't love a good breakdown.
Sounds farmiliar though. Oh wait...

82.
WHAT?! Over already?!
Damn. this song could easily go on another 2-3 minutes in my opinion.

I think you shouold add an interlude that goes back to the tribal feel.

And you definately need a solo.

...Definately.


So to reiterate...

Extend it.


7/10 for not finishing.


Would you mind critting one of mine? "The Theft" in my sig.
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#4
Yeah, the song's definitely not done yet, but I don't know where to go with it.

As for the Indian-like feel to the intro, it's basically the song that my high school's marching band plays as the football players enter the field at our home games, so I decided to incorporate it into a song.

But, yeah, I don't know where to go with it right now. I'm waiting for a revelation or something, because that's usually how I finish songs.
#5
Quote by Gun Delirious
Yeah, the song's definitely not done yet, but I don't know where to go with it.

As for the Indian-like feel to the intro, it's basically the song that my high school's marching band plays as the football players enter the field at our home games, so I decided to incorporate it into a song.

But, yeah, I don't know where to go with it right now. I'm waiting for a revelation or something, because that's usually how I finish songs.


Are you telling me your songs are an ACT OF GOD?!

Brilliant. lol.


As for where to go

i think this is a good general direction
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War Chant[1].gp5
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