#1
This one was posted before....now it changed a lot...i changed the main riff...
so i guess its worth to be posted again...
i think the lyrics should be about life stuff...sad stuff....donno what do u think?
im ready for suggestion...harsh critisim is the most welcomed....
I do SERIOUS C4C of course....

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#2
Awesome melodies really. Great work man. It still sounds like nothing without bass. Also drums could be more creative. I like your solo. Pretty nice song, actually awesome, but you could make drums more creative and add more instruments to make it cooler.
#3
Very nice, soothing song. Not much to crit here actually, it's great.
Like xbitmetal said, the bass should be filled out but I think you know that yourself too as you added a bass track.

One personal opinion though: when I was listening to the solo part I was "desperately" waiting for one or several bendings as bendings have a very strong emotional effect (for me at least) and this is one very emotional song. But this is just personal taste.
#4
Jeez there's only so much i can criticize on a piece like this.

The only problems i had were that i felt you needed a bit more variation in the drums. Keep the same feel, but just different patterns here and there.

My other problem was that i felt the riff at 18 didn't need to be repeated three times. Twice is enough. ... Unles you added a bit of variation in the third repeat. Nothing drastic, but just a little something so you could tell theres a difference.


Other than that, i thought it was perfect. Your solo fit amazingly, and i'm not usually a fan of solos. I also loved your chords. I've never had a chance to learn much about chord structure.

Keep up the good work!
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