#1
it's still rough, just wrote it. oh and my grammar and spelling probably suck in it! =]

Right now I’ll tell you just what I want
A boy to care not really a lot
But why is it that I’m still alone
Are my rules just too hard?

Every girl has checklist
And every boy always fails it
Here it is in five little steps

One don’t lie to her
Two don’t be a jerk
Three say something sweet
And four plead on your knees
When you break number three
And five just love her
Five simple rules
But they always break,
Boys are no good for me (x3)

I watch the notebook too much
But when is my Noah gonna show up
He’s so damn sweet
I just want someone like that
I wanna feel the butterflies
And feel the girl’s eyes
When they’re jealous of my guy
Oh wouldn’t that be a dream

Every girl has checklist
And every boy always fails it
Here it is in five little steps

One don’t lie to her
Two don’t be a jerk
Three say something sweet
And four plead on your knees
When you break number three
And five just love her
Five simple rules
But they always break,
Boys are no good for me (x3)

He kissed me on the cheek today
almost made me fall over right there.
Just a little gesture that meant the world
and now I’m on cloud nine.
Smiles and giggles I became one of them
Those girls I’ve always hated

Every girl has checklist
And this boy doesn’t fail it
Here it is in five little steps

One he doesn’t lie to me
Two he isn’t a jerk
Three he’s always sweet
And four he’s not on his knees
Because he follows number three
And five he loves me
Five simple rules
That he never breaks,
This boy’s so good for me (x3)


hey! just tell me what you think please =]
#2
i think it rules, tottally awesome
Sorry if Ive offended some kind of Punk God I should brush up on my Commandments of Punk maybe copy down the Punk Bible a few thousand times so I don't forget again sorry for my error O Punk Master Of All Things That Are Punk .
#3
The repetition was a bit much for me, but I liked the way you changed it up a little. Overall it had a pretty cute story and some nice ideas. Keep working on it.