So I've recently started to song write and I want to get some critiques on things that i should really work on and things that i do well. I'm really looking to get better, so anything is appreciated.

I go into all the world
just to find what I'm looking for
an empty handed return (in one accord)

I come to find, to see,
that this melody inside of me,
is fading (is fading faster)

how can i breathe, in such small space?
imprison me, through closing doors
how can i see, to light your face
discomfort me, your only hurting yourself
pretty good start for songwriting...nice job keep it up.
"I'll have 2 number nines, a number nine large, a number six with extra dip, a number seven, two number forty-fives, one with cheese, and a large soda" ~Melvin 'Big Smoke' Harris.
i like it a lot. i dont know if you were gonna but if its not finished id like to see the full song
My gear
Epiphone Les Paul Standard
B-52 LS100 Half Stack
Dunlop SW30 Slash Signature Wah
Digitech Hardwire CR-7 Stereo Chorus
Digitech Hardwire DL-8 Delay/Looper
Boss BD-2 Blues Driver
Fender CD220CE Acoustic