#1
just wanted to know what you guys thought of how my song is coming along
i just recorded this, the guitars sound choppy but this is just to outline the song so far

its intro, lead out of intro, stop, breakdown, clean part

it sounds really choppy in the transition from breakdown to clean but thats just cause its punched in and i am lazy..just let me know what you think so far
http://dl.dropbox.com/u/3516005/untitled.mp3
#2
Nice ideas, good riffs. It definitely needs to be worked on a whole lot. Your guitars sounds real metallic, you need to work on that a little. The clean end would make a good ending also. Other than that, that'll make a pretty cool song. You need to piece these ideas together correctly to make them work although. Those riffs are pretty rad man, keep it up.

Crit mine?

https://www.ultimate-guitar.com/forum/showthread.php?t=1246520
#3
its true, i copied and pasted this together riff by riff so that's a big reason. not that i can't play it straight through, just i drank tonight and this was an easier/faster way
#5
sounded phat mate!

tbh though, sounds like your trying to be too much like other bands, with the chugga chug, sweep sweep, chugga chug.

Know what im sayin?
I mean, i love techdeath with a passion, but theres too many tech bands that sound the same now which is a huge shame.

But i really liked the acoustic riff after, maybe keep that riff going, add a heavy guitar track over it, bring in the drums, into a breakdown but with the acoustic riff still in play.

A few changes here and there and this could be the start of an epic track man!

Keep me updated!
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