#1
Desperate

Another metalcore song I wrote, it follows the rhythm of the guitars very carefully. Its actually pretty catchy if you could hear the music behind it, anyways here it is.


I laugh at your failed relations
just a leech off other peoples lives
so ashamed to have even affiliated
its time for our... final goodbyes

asking me now,
what could you do
skank its obvious that
we've... been... through
for the last year,
everything was fine
until I found out where you
spent... your... time

Don't you ever talk to me again (me again)
just hold your breath
choke on the air that fills your head
no ones hand to hold
cant you see that your useless all alone
Now its time for you to
hold... your... own...

asking me now,
what could you do
skank its obvious that
we've... been... through
for the last year,
everything was fine
until I found out,
where you
spent... your... time

as desperate as you look
ill turn my head away
release you into the deep
you no longer need to stay
so go ahead
replace.. the... hole
your just a thief of
every... mans... soul

asking me now,
what could you do
skank its obvious that
we've... been... through
for the last year,
everything was fine
until I found out,
where you
spent... your... time

asking me now,
what could you do
skank its obvious that
we've... been... through
for the last year,
everything was fine
until I found out,
where you
spent... your... time
#4
nice, complete total awesome imagry there, good glow, nice use of wording and gramatical impact
Sorry if Ive offended some kind of Punk God I should brush up on my Commandments of Punk maybe copy down the Punk Bible a few thousand times so I don't forget again sorry for my error O Punk Master Of All Things That Are Punk .
#5
Nice! Your words really hit the mark, and it has great flow.
You and I are mortal, but rock n roll will never die.
#6
I love it, like its so simple but it portrays the image so well. How long have you been writing songs?
#8
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I appreciate all the complements, I'm still fairly new at writing lyrics. This is probably the 3rd song I've ever fully written by myself. I am more of a guitar player lol

Well I have to say you did pretty well for your third attempt
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