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Hey, I wrote this song a few days ago, might as well see what people think of it.

I think it could use some work, but not sure how to go about it.

The italics are the chorus.. after the second chorus, I intend a bridge basically without words, and then just the chorus again.

Any comments welcomed.


I can't see anything,
I'm blind without you,
I can't feel anything,
I'm numb without you,

I know I heard you cry,
But there was nothing I could do,
So now I'm left here all alone,
Barely alive and nowhere near you..


I can't sleep 'cuz in my mind,
Are only thoughts of you,
I can't eat and I can't drink,
'Cuz when I do it reminds me of you,

I know I heard you cry,
But there was nothing I could do,
So now I'm left here all alone,
Barely alive and nowhere near you..