#1
she's a dancer, and when she cries
you're the reason
she's a lover, and when she cries
your the reason

does it make you feel fine
to know
that girl is crying, i wish she was mine
you know

i could treat her
so much better
no i would never

she's a shining star, and when she cries
you're the reason
she's a beauty, and when she cries
your the reason

i could treat her
so much better
no i would never

sometimes i want to show you
stop you before she knows
sometimes i want to hurt you
hurt you before she cries

but she loves you,
and for that i could to......
Sorry if Ive offended some kind of Punk God I should brush up on my Commandments of Punk maybe copy down the Punk Bible a few thousand times so I don't forget again sorry for my error O Punk Master Of All Things That Are Punk .
Last edited by BrandyCross at Dec 22, 2009,
#2
I enjoyed this. I thought it was good. I would leave the part out about "I want to hurt you". I would probably change it to "sometimes I want to show you"
#4
I think the last stanza doesn't really fit with the rest of the song, especially the last line, since it doesn't rhyme with any word. Otherwise I really liked it.
#5
thanks guy's i made a few changes, wanna tell me what you think>????
Sorry if Ive offended some kind of Punk God I should brush up on my Commandments of Punk maybe copy down the Punk Bible a few thousand times so I don't forget again sorry for my error O Punk Master Of All Things That Are Punk .