#1
Well this is my first attempt at songwriting, I've actually put some chords to it as well, but here are the lyrics.

My Favourite Song

Well I'm just chillin'
But there's somethin missin'
And I can't quite work it out

When my heart starts skippin'
And my knee starts jumpin'
Not sure what it's all about

I can't think straight
Nor can I relate
My emotions to what's going on

Finally my head tells me
What my heart knew all along
Yeah....

This is my favourite song
This is my favourite song
This is my favourite song
This is my favourite song

Now I'm feeling great
There's a spring in my gait
And everything's going just right

There are plans to make
And I might need a date
'Cos i want to party tonight

Thankfully my head told me
What my heart knew all along
Yeah...

This is my favourite song
This is my favourite song
This is my favourite song
This is my favourite song

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That's all i've got for now, thanks for any crits - The genre's sort of Rock RNB btw.
#2
If this is really your first song, well done. There are a few traps new writers frequently fall into, and there aren't too many you've displayed here. There isn't a whole lot going on, either. Obviously this isn't particularly dense subject matter, but you can always flesh out the lyrics a bit. Put some imagery in there, spice it up."Spring in my gait" though is a bit rough. Unless that's a common saying where you're from. I just see it as a forced rhyme for "great." You may (emphasis on may) want to fill out the chorus more. With a shorter song like this, the same line again and again can cross into repetitive if you're not careful. Good luck!
When crying don't help
You can't compose yourself
It's best to compose a poem
An honest verse of longing
Or a simple song of hope...
#3
cool, great job for a first song
Sorry if Ive offended some kind of Punk God I should brush up on my Commandments of Punk maybe copy down the Punk Bible a few thousand times so I don't forget again sorry for my error O Punk Master Of All Things That Are Punk .
#4
Very upbeat, I like that. It had a reggae type feel to it.
I'll pretend I can mod your amp but break it instead.
#5
Definately reggae. What did you write it as?
Blinded by the exertions of man
I stumble through the haze of modern malfunctions


Dropping myself into darkness
#6
Nice and simple, great first song. Keep it up.
You and I are mortal, but rock n roll will never die.
#7
Quote by Major Bob
Definately reggae. What did you write it as?


Well it starts out with a sort of reggae feel, similar to I'm Yours by Jason Mraz I suppose, but the chorus picks up and has more of a Mark Ronson feel to it I guess.