#1
This is a song i wrote for my band a few months ago. If you like the look of it check out my sig, but we haven't recorded this one yet.


I see her,
She blind to me.
I hear her,
But she don't hear me.

I wrote this,
As cry of desperation,
She heard this,
A sigh of exasperation.

I know a Girl with Sweet Cherry lips,
But to who will she give them: Not to me, Not to me.
I know a Girl with sweet Dancing Hips,
But who will she dance with: Not with me, Not with me.

Three, word lines,
Show a Lack of creativity.
She says she could do it better,
But who will she sing it to, Not to me!

I think that I can't decide but I've made my mind up deep inside.
Half of me will stay and fight the other part will run and hide.
I used to see the sky so clear but now I've grown up I am blind.
Half of me will stay but the other wants this left behind.


I know a Girl with Sweet Cherry lips,
But to who will she give them: Not to me, Not to me.
I know a Girl with sweet Dancing Hips,
But who will she dance with: Not with me, Not with me.
I know a Girl, with Fire in her eyes,
But who will she Burn with: Not with me, Not with me.
I know a Girl Who speaks the truth in her Lies
But in to Whom does she trust, Not to me Not to me

Not to Me [Ad Nauseum]
#2
i think with a little bit of smoothing out to make it more grammatically acceptable it would be great
Sorry if Ive offended some kind of Punk God I should brush up on my Commandments of Punk maybe copy down the Punk Bible a few thousand times so I don't forget again sorry for my error O Punk Master Of All Things That Are Punk .
#4
I really like the way you suddenly bring in really long lines, I can't work out what effect it has but whatever it is it's a good one!
Blinded by the exertions of man
I stumble through the haze of modern malfunctions


Dropping myself into darkness