#1
I think you may be able to guess what this is about

As I stare into your eyes,
I’m sent to a euphoric place,
Where there's trees all around,
And the leaves graze the sky.
I close my eyes
As the cool breeze whispers to me:
“Stay as long as you like, my friend,
It’s much better here.”

I become comfortably numb.
As I open my eyes
I look around
To see the forest so alive;
The trees sway in sync
To the song played by the wind.
It seems so familiar
Like a long-lost friend.

A warmth inside
Flows through my veins.
Happiness and light
Replaces sadness and pain.
You appear at my side
And you take me by the hand,
And for a time
I feel as though I’ve become...

Island Lady,
You show me more than love.
Your warmth and caring
Shows me what I’ve become.
Island Lady,
You’re always there for me.
Your sweet smell allures me
And sets me free.

The sun
Glistens off the waves
And my feet
Are warmed by the sand.
The tide rushes in
And flows through my toes,
And for a moment
I feel as though I could fly.

A warmth inside
Flows through my veins.
Happiness and light
Replaces sadness and pain.
You appear at my side
And take me by the hand.
And for a time
I feel as though I’ve become...

Island Lady,
You show me more than love.
Your warmth and caring
Shows me what I’ve become.
Island Lady,
You’re always there for me.
Your sweet smell allures me
And sets me free.

Next thing I know
We’re standing on a cloud.
It’s just us way up here,
Nothing else to be found.
But it doesn’t last long,
For the cloud turns to rain
And we fall to Earth.
But these feelings, I’ll retain.

I awake in my bed.
I hear the trees sway in the wind.
It’s a calming noise,
Reminds me of a place I have been.
I open the shades
And the sun streams in on me,
But those feelings I recall
From the moment I was so free.

Island Lady,
You show me more than love.
Your warmth and caring
Shows me what I’ve become.
Island Lady,
You’re always there for me.
Your sweet smell allures me
And sets me free.
Last edited by ItsOnlyGNR at Dec 23, 2009,
#2
i liked it all except for the (next thing i know, we're standing on a cloud verse, ) it jsut doesnt hold up to the quality of the rest of it and kinda seems like an add on to me :P sorry. but other than that, loved it, stoner dude
Sorry if Ive offended some kind of Punk God I should brush up on my Commandments of Punk maybe copy down the Punk Bible a few thousand times so I don't forget again sorry for my error O Punk Master Of All Things That Are Punk .
#3
Quote by BrandyCross
i liked it all except for the (next thing i know, we're standing on a cloud verse, ) it jsut doesnt hold up to the quality of the rest of it and kinda seems like an add on to me :P sorry. but other than that, loved it, stoner dude


It actually was an add on. I wrote the music for the song first (if you wanna hear the song, it's in my profile, although I don't have the vocals recorded because I don't have a microphone ), then I wrote the lyrics. I was then lining the lyrics up with music and I realized I forgot about the verse after the solo. So I tried to fit something between "the beach" and "the morning after" verses. Thanks for the crit though, I'll try to improve that verse

EDIT: Oops, just realized there is a typo in the second line.
Last edited by ItsOnlyGNR at Dec 23, 2009,
#4
cool , its good, but just doesnt have the flow the rest of it has
Sorry if Ive offended some kind of Punk God I should brush up on my Commandments of Punk maybe copy down the Punk Bible a few thousand times so I don't forget again sorry for my error O Punk Master Of All Things That Are Punk .