#1
The only song in my profile. Unfortunately, I don't have a single microphone, so I couldn't record vocals, and I refuse to use my computer mic to record. It may be a little long to listen to without any vocals and only two 30-second solos, but please listen to the whole thing, it would be very much appreciated If you want to read the lyrics, however, I posted them in S&L, here's the link: https://www.ultimate-guitar.com/forum/showthread.php?p=22693863#post22693863


Feel free to to crit about anything and everything. I want your opinion on one specific thing though: For some reason I always have trouble balancing the instruments volume-wise. Do you think that anything could've been quieter or louder?
Last edited by ItsOnlyGNR at Dec 23, 2009,
#2
Hey

Your song reminds me of Pearl jam's Alive, the song and the guitar tone =)

Good chord progression. You should try an acoustic guitar on it in the quiet parts it might sound good

The first solo is pretty cool and groovy =)

And with the ending solo, I would have started it before (during the "quiet" part.. chorus?) and then speed it up. That's just an idea =).

I think your lyrics will fill in it perfectly
Oh by the way, I don't know why but the drumkit sounds a little off at somebeats.

Thanks for the critique anyway
#3
Quote by flaphead325
Hey

Your song reminds me of Pearl jam's Alive, the song and the guitar tone =)

Good chord progression. You should try an acoustic guitar on it in the quiet parts it might sound good

The first solo is pretty cool and groovy =)

And with the ending solo, I would have started it before (during the "quiet" part.. chorus?) and then speed it up. That's just an idea =).

I think your lyrics will fill in it perfectly
Oh by the way, I don't know why but the drumkit sounds a little off at somebeats.

Thanks for the critique anyway


Thanks for the crit.
the song was actually inspired by "Alive" (not to mention that a lot of my guitar style, besides my soloing, comes from Stone Gossard and Mike McCready), along with "Cherub Rock" by the Smashing Pumpkins, and Beggars- and Hangars-On by Slash's Snakepit.

And about the drumkit, for some reason my drum software (which is Garageband) lags sometimes, I don't know why. I try to get it as close as I can to the beat by slowing the tempo down, recording the drums, and then speeding the song back up, but it always gets a little off sometimes. I like to think that it gives the song a "raw" feeling lol.
#4
^ yeah, I agree, an acoustic in the slower parts would sound very nice. The drums are programmed very nicely too, gets off beat sometimes, but I understand since your doing it the way you explained. The guitar tone is a bit lacking in volume. It almost sounds like you double tracked, and its off slightly, but double tracking is pretty hard at times. I like the overall feel of the song, its very cool and rockish. Just bring your guitars forward a bit and should be all good. Thanks for the crit too.
#5
Quote by ethan_hanus
^ yeah, I agree, an acoustic in the slower parts would sound very nice. The drums are programmed very nicely too, gets off beat sometimes, but I understand since your doing it the way you explained. The guitar tone is a bit lacking in volume. It almost sounds like you double tracked, and its off slightly, but double tracking is pretty hard at times. I like the overall feel of the song, its very cool and rockish. Just bring your guitars forward a bit and should be all good. Thanks for the crit too.


Actually it's not double-tracked, I have one guitar part panned to one side and and a different guitar part panned into the other. I know there part you're thinking of though, when both guitars are playing the same thing, the quiet part after the intro, and yeah, they are just a tad off a couple times. I'll find some time to fix that and then bring the guitars forward a little.

Thanks
Last edited by ItsOnlyGNR at Dec 24, 2009,