#1
this is my first full song that im proud of
its inspired by my mom having cancer(she is all good now) and cancer in general


Spoken:
it feeds on the fear of death
the greed takes the victims by surprise
and without remorse...it kills...

Chorus:
growing on fear, pain, and misery
slowly takes another EDIT:martyr away
greedily takes their sanity
ruthless, agonizing, torment descends
spreading through your veins
IT FEEDS!! IT FEEDS

Verse 1:
assassination from within
while wielding the deadly grin
the only evidence immortal scars and gaping wounds
death tells all but the truth
everlasting quest to find the cure
lest it lives forever more
retaliate! chemical warfare
TAKE CONTROL!

Verse 2:
controlled by the deadly grip
from its mouth your blood will drip
leavin behind broken memories and crying eyes
fueled by hate and sinister lies
with little hope shining through
retaliate! chemical warfare
CEASE THE DAY

Spoken before solo
another victim sucumbs to the killers hands
if not stopped will lead humanity to extinction
were just food for the diease...because the cancer
it feeds...
Last edited by bösepriester at Dec 27, 2009,
#2
the only change i think it needs is in the chorus, maybe another word besides victims, it interferes with the song :P
this however = just perfect

assassination from within
while wielding the deadly grin
the only evidence immortal scars and gaping wounds
death tells all but the truth
everlasting quest to find the cure
lest it lives forever more
retaliate! chemical warfare
TAKE CONTROL!
Sorry if Ive offended some kind of Punk God I should brush up on my Commandments of Punk maybe copy down the Punk Bible a few thousand times so I don't forget again sorry for my error O Punk Master Of All Things That Are Punk .
#5
Quote by bösepriester
and instead of victims in the chorus
shoud i use sacrifice? or scapegoat?

scapegoat i think ,
c4c means critique for critique, but i dont think thats fair unless it is agreed to beforehand , great peice here btw
Sorry if Ive offended some kind of Punk God I should brush up on my Commandments of Punk maybe copy down the Punk Bible a few thousand times so I don't forget again sorry for my error O Punk Master Of All Things That Are Punk .
#6
thanks
i have to widen my vocab because i keep wanting to use the same words.

thesaurus here i come