#1
The children all send their regards,
especially the stolen
and the ones who never really gave a care

They miss you more than you could know
but you already knew that
I know you know I don't miss you at all

Light sneaks in through pin pricked skies
and sparks a glow 'round my feet
stalking alone, smoking in the dark

I left a part of me around these parts
you've done your best to hide it
I'm never gonna find it on my own

because it's cold
and we're scared
they're still looking for a sign
but I'm convinced it isn't there
we're alone
I'm alone
and I'm barking hate at myself
through a cosmic telephone

I've been told the end will come
and I've been told you'll bring it
I've been told the end will come
and I've been told you'll bring it
I've been told the end will come
and I've been told you'll bring it
but I'm still holding out for better days
I want Super Saiyan abilities
#2
Not really sure where the title came from, but it certainly sounds cool.

As for the piece, I got a really depressed feel from it, but not in a cliche kind of way. It was a fresher take on the depressed mood. Good read

If you don't mind:

https://www.ultimate-guitar.com/forum/showthread.php?t=1251633
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I stick stuff in my pee hole.

Gear:

Schecter C-1 Classic
Ibanez S670PB
Stratocaster MIM Standard
Marshall MG30 (its purple )
Dunlop Crybaby Wah
#3
Some really memorable lines in the right places. It's definitely got punch to it. I'm not sure if it's just the title, but it's got a kind of Cedric Bixler-Zavala feel to it. Can't really see anything that strikes me as out-of-place in it.

What genre of music is it going to be set to?
Quote by Marcel Veltman
Being a rather mediocre musician myself, I'm all on the hand of Haanz.

Guitar:
MIM '09 Fender Telecaster
Laney VC15-110 Old English White '10
Freshman FOP1DN Acoustic

Bass:
Ibanez SRX590
Laney RB4
Tech21 SansAmp BassDriver DI
Boss ODB-3
#5
musically it's kind of Kevin Devine meets Cast Spells
I want Super Saiyan abilities
#6
The children all send their regards,
especially the stolen
and the ones who never really gave a care <-the phrase "gave a care" seems weak to me.

They miss you more than you could know
but you already knew that
I know you know I don't miss you at all <i like the contradiction going on here, actually. i don't know why, i think it works

Light sneaks in through pin pricked skies
and sparks a glow 'round my feet
stalking alone, smoking in the dark <stalking?

I left a part of me around these parts
you've done your best to hide it
I'm never gonna find it on my own

because it's cold
and we're scared
they're still looking for a sign
but I'm convinced it isn't there
we're alone
I'm alone
and I'm barking hate at myself
through a cosmic telephone

I've been told the end will come
and I've been told you'll bring it
I've been told the end will come
and I've been told you'll bring it
I've been told the end will come
and I've been told you'll bring it
but I'm still holding out for better days <i like the end.

i like it overall. it feels just a tiny bit disconnected, but not terribly.