#1
Hi, this is the first time i've stuck something up in a good while now. Slow, melodic piece. I was trying to sound melancholic at the time, but i don't think i've really achieved that.

I think more needs to happen at times? I was trying to keep it refrained, but it seems a little .too. sparse on occasion. I personally think the ending could be more powerful too.

Please give me your thoughts, C4C as always,

Gerbs.
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#2
Kind of reminds me of Pink Floyd, could get really psychedelic if you wanted it to be

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