#2
alright, your drums lose time a lot, mostly during fills.
Your guitar has a noticeable difference in quality from all of the other instruments.
A few of the keyboards sound a little fake.
The song sounds more like a jam, it lacks writing.
Cool, but needs work.

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#3
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alright, your drums lose time a lot, mostly during fills.
Your guitar has a noticeable difference in quality from all of the other instruments.
A few of the keyboards sound a little fake.
The song sounds more like a jam, it lacks writing.
Cool, but needs work.

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I'll work on that. Drumming with a keyboard is hard
Quality as in writing quality or tonal quality?
Which sounds? I can record a real piano if I need to, but I don't know if I'd be able to record a better electric one.
Yeah, it was a bit of a jam. I'll work on piecing it together more sometime.
Thanks

I'll do my best, I'm not a very good critic though.
Last edited by Alex Vik at Jan 2, 2010,
#4
Your work has potential, but I feel it lacks something. Maybe vocals, maybe a lead line, i'm not sure (and I only listened to a couple of songs, so maybe i'm missing something), but you might want to take that into consideration.

Also I noticed that whilst the drums were solid and effective, at times they seemed to lose timing, which really affected how i perceived the whole peice. I understand that you use keyboards for drumming, so this is understandable!

Overall I enjoyed what I heard, but it was a little repetitive at times, and the tone quality was sometimes less than brilliant for the guitars.

Hope this helped!

Peace.
#5
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Your work has potential, but I feel it lacks something. Maybe vocals, maybe a lead line, i'm not sure (and I only listened to a couple of songs, so maybe i'm missing something), but you might want to take that into consideration.

Also I noticed that whilst the drums were solid and effective, at times they seemed to lose timing, which really affected how i perceived the whole peice. I understand that you use keyboards for drumming, so this is understandable!

Overall I enjoyed what I heard, but it was a little repetitive at times, and the tone quality was sometimes less than brilliant for the guitars.

Hope this helped!

Peace.

Ok, thanks. I'm not that good of a singer or lyricist, so I'll get my friend to help me out with that.

Thanks for understanding.

I'll work on the guitar tone. I don't have a very good mic, so I might try using the line out of my amp to see if that makes it sound any better. Plus the amp speaker isn't all that great anyways.

It helped a lot, and I'll take what you said into consideration!