You should definitely keep developing it. I like where its heading. That being said the sound becomes a little muddled and indistinguishable when the lead guitar comes in and in my personal opinion 20 seconds into a song is a little early for a break, but hey thats your call. keep working on it and post it when your done, good start though
Thanks. Don't worry about the sound problems, it's only the Guitar Pro Version.
And it's not a break really, it's more like a bridge.

All I want to know it's if you like its melody and direction.