It didn't have any recognizable structure... It just seemed to keep going on random things. I know this probably doesn't help as much as you'd like but tell him that he needs to structure his songs.

the bass interlude was pretty odd. just as a side note.
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The intro is too fast. Slow it down.

"Our revenge so everlasting sweet,
Enslave your Children, Behead the weak,
Kill every last Man, Woman and Machine
The cleansing has begun.
Your meek defense is foolish,
we come from the stars a trillion strong."