#1
ive been playing guitar for about a year now and i feel my skills have really progressed fast and im almost up to par with people who have been playing for many years now and over the past few months ive been tryin to start a hard rock/progressive metal band. i have also during that time been working on my song writing skills ive written about 5 other songs but believe me they arent all that good ive had friends read them and now i feel ive got it down as long as i have motivation so here are 2 songs i wrote a few weeks ago and i feel they are really good

1. Asylum for the Sane

asylum for the sane

my methods are sane in my eyes
not in yours
i wonder why

you take people not like you
and lock them in a place
and try to brain wash them too

you take the people
just like you
walking talking acting just like you

they rule the world now
you give them everything
and we're locked in the asylum for the sane

asylum for the sane
asylum for the sane

in your eyes only the insane are sane
brainwashed to think like you
exactly the same

your methods
you pick what only best for the brainwashed cronies cleaning your desk
and leave the rest here
what to do

think about things not accepted in your life
it’s all we think about in our own life
shunned by you
accepted by many
who think just like we do
the sane

and now we're all home here
lock away
planning life after our escape
from the
asylum for the sane

asylum for the sane
asylum for the sane

break out now
live our lives our own way
army united
to never give in
to propaganda fed
brainwashed
meat heads

it’s our life
let us live it proud
now all with us shout

WE BROKE OUT!!!


2. Night

Night is alone
Night is alive
Peace and quiet
Yet why does night still cry

Emptiness
Right in front of us
Or continuing forever
Serenity

Night brings us in
We’re lost in darkness
No escaping
Let’s make best of this
For

Night is alone
Night is alive
It is peace and quiet
Serenity
Night is nothing
Yet everything
Everything we love
And hate at the same time
And we’re stuck outside

Night is soothing
Staring out into space
Calm soothing peacefulness
Night’s life is this

No one can see him
Or he sees them
Let’s live this way forever

Night is alone
Night is alive
It is peace and quiet
Serenity
Night is nothing
Yet everything
Everything we love
And hate at the same time
And we’re stuck outside

Night brings us in
Sees we’re lost
Gives us a place to stay
We live this way
Through and through
Best thing that’s happened

It’s a great thing
Seems too good to believe
Because
Everything night gives us
Comes alive in our hands
Cherish it so
Because

Night is alone
Night is alive
It is peace and quiet
Serenity
Night is nothing
Yet everything
Everything we love
And hate at the same time
And now we’re inside
Even though we’re outside

And the arrows have fallen
Uncovering the sun
There was no night at all
Only demise

At least a good thing
Lasted for a while
Now the arrows of serenity
Peacefulness
And divinity
Rip though me

Night left me changed
No longer crying
Now gone
And alone


please tell me what u honestly think and anything i need to work on. also wen i write i try to go for a deeper meaning that most song so if u could comment on that as well it would be nice. thank u all who read.
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