#1
1:43 long Overture for my composition-in-progress entitled the Orchestra of Guitars. On my profile called Orchestra of Guitars for now.

Its a neoclassical metal style thing and also my first attempt at recording a piece of music. The mp3 compression makes some parts of the rhythm guitar fairly hard to hear but I can't really fix that and upload it to UG.

Any criticism is greatly appreciated - prefferably pointing out everything wrong with it rather/as well as whatever is good about it. C4C obviously

"The mind is its own place, and in itself

Can make a Heav'n of Hell, a Hell of Heav'n"

- John Milton, Paradise Lost
#2
hye there... So this is still a work in progress.. I find it quite chaotic with the lead and the rhythm... I wasn't sure what story are you trying to tell in this piece.. cos each song have their own story to tell.. but yours... I can't get it... :|

I know its not finished yet... so there are possibilities that you can improve your song here... add some more bass and drums...

crit mine?
https://www.ultimate-guitar.com/forum/showthread.php?t=1239070
#3
Rythym needs to be improved, or there needs to be some kind of groove added to it because it feels kinda chaotic as jemeput said. As well there seems to be a lot of background noise, I'm not sure if that's the recording software you used or if it was sloppy technique, but slow it down a bit and get the parts right.

However, I know it was a work-in-progress, and I know mine turn out much worse considering I have trouble recording two guitars without a drum track because I tend to change tempos a lot and ends up being all jumbled.

Now what I really like was the phrase that started up at 0:40, it really wowed me and impressed me, because that's a great lick. I really like what you did in that lick and definitely that feels like the hook/chorus of your song. To be honest, this stuff isn't really my style, so just take what I say with a grain of truth.

Crit mine?
https://www.ultimate-guitar.com/forum/showthread.php?t=1256683
#4
THe song was pretty cool, but the melody was legit all just arpeggios, some note skipping or different rhythms would liven it up. You need some bass and drums and better quality. It makes it hard to listen to the song. either way would def be a cool piece polished to together. C4C?
https://www.ultimate-guitar.com/forum/showthread.php?t=1257583
Last edited by MetalBass 77 at Jan 8, 2010,
#5
It's supposed to sound pretty chaotic, altough I know what you mean by background fuzz - thats just terrible rhythm tone playing powerchords, I'll try remix it to see if that can sort out that problem. Thanks everyone who's commented!

"The mind is its own place, and in itself

Can make a Heav'n of Hell, a Hell of Heav'n"

- John Milton, Paradise Lost