Gerbs
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Join date: Jun 2007
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#2
For quite a simple pattern it sounds very nice - I like the use of more non-standard chords than your average song. I can imagine it sounds a bit fuller in real life, but now, especially on Guitar Pro it seems a little 'flat' - lifeless...

I like the interplay between the two guitars, but in bar 14, there's a bit of dissonance (beat 3) that you might want to look at.

However I don't really think the piece goes anywhere at only 16 bars. While I realise it's an intro, even then it's still too small in my opinion - you could probably do quite a bit with it should you want to. Expand upon it, let your imagination run riot...

If you want a bit of C4C up in this bitch; go here, but i'm not fussed!

I hope the piece goes somewhere when you're done!