WestOfTheSun
Registered User
Join date: Nov 2009
381 IQ
#1
So this is the first thing I've written and tabbed out. tell me what you think, its very short, just the intro riff so far. I plan to make it into a prog-rock/math-rock thing.
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Robotic vampire surfing astronught.gp5
Last edited by WestOfTheSun at May 10, 2010,
asator
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Join date: Jan 2007
525 IQ
#2
There's not really enough to crit properly here, but I'll try..

First thing that stands out is that the riff is in 12/8 and is 2 bars long, but you've put it in some bizarre time signature to the point that it doesn't add up and GP registers it as an error. Guessing you're trying to make it seem more technical than it is? Either way, fix that.

The ride cymbal and hi hat in the drum score are disorientating and they seem totally random. Again, trying to seem unnecessarily techniical?

It's a nice riff though, and good interplay between the 2 guitars. But I'm not going to give it marks out of 10 so far because there's just not enough there yet. I suggest looking for feedback when you have a song, or a substantial part. Not 2 out of time bars of an intro
My name is Danny. Call me that.
WestOfTheSun
Registered User
Join date: Nov 2009
381 IQ
#3
Quote by asator
There's not really enough to crit properly here, but I'll try..

First thing that stands out is that the riff is in 12/8 and is 2 bars long, but you've put it in some bizarre time signature to the point that it doesn't add up and GP registers it as an error. Guessing you're trying to make it seem more technical than it is? Either way, fix that.

The ride cymbal and hi hat in the drum score are disorientating and they seem totally random. Again, trying to seem unnecessarily techniical?

It's a nice riff though, and good interplay between the 2 guitars. But I'm not going to give it marks out of 10 so far because there's just not enough there yet. I suggest looking for feedback when you have a song, or a substantial part. Not 2 out of time bars of an intro


awesome more than i was expecting

First things first, im a total noob lol. So the unnecessarily technical is just a musical error because i dont know how to use Guitar pro lol. And the drums are pretty much random because i dont know how to drum, i just used a vague idea and ran with it. But my god, thanks for the crit, and yes I fixed the time signature
asator
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Join date: Jan 2007
525 IQ
#4
Haha fair enough. You'll get used to figuring out time signatures and stuff on Guitar Pro the more you do it It's a good start, look forward to hearing more.
My name is Danny. Call me that.