#3
you need to throw some harmonics in. alternate the low E string to get some tri notes in
#4
Quote by kfkslayerkfk
#1 Take some lessons in audio production
#2 Sounds like crap


You really don't have any room to talk, considering the lack of anything on your profile.


As far as the riff goes, it's a pretty decent riff. It could use a little work, but you could easily make a good song out of it.

You, good sir, have not gone over to your friends house after a hard night of drinking to find 2 dudes passed out in the same room both holding their own flaccid cocks in hand, passed out, with porn on the tv.
#5
Shit, man.... I thought you were joking. I guess as input I could say it sounds really stoner-like and sludgy-ish? Try to play it in time better, with MUCH less string squeak.
#6
sounds nice it reminded me of sabbath kinda
you should start playing with a metronome/a clock with hands
in "coming after you" the drummer seems like he's trying to keep up with you
but realizes he needs to set the tempo later on
don't get too caught up in what you're playing and how 'awesome' it sounds
you should be more focused on a group sound instead of just your own instrument

tempo is key though, there's some free metronomes online but i strongly suggest tuxguitar
it's a knock off version of guitarpro and all that other shit but it includes a metronome and tuner. on top of that you can create your own licks by just pressing 1-0 on your typing keyboard then playing along with it on your guitar after you've finished. this keeps tempo and it's a lot easier to create better licks because you don't necessarily have to have skill to just type in a tab. it plays in only midi files but you can somehow add a drum beat by just using another bands tab. also if you use this don't forget to use the repeats at the beginning and end of the staff, it saves a lot of time so you won't have to type in a rhythm riff over and over

edit; shits free btw
#7
Quote by kfkslayerkfk
#1 Take some lessons in audio production
#2 Sounds like crap


appreciate all the criticism...however this is not criticism above....I should also mention the songs I have with drums in them,the drums are from drum apps or programs so thats why they sound kinda weird in the songs...I am moving away from using those apps for that very purpose....I have been told about using a metronome,I will give it a shot