#1
blanketed by the sweetly sickening sounds of

whining church bells,

the boy gathers his things on his way to

sunday school.

they never told him what jesus did

with those 12 apostles of his,

but after sunday school he had

a vague idea

as he walked home with a limp.
#2
Whining seems a poor choice to describe a bell.


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#3
I never heard a church bell whine before. I like it, but you need to work on word choice.